Kexo_Be_Up
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It is a good idea but the execution is kinda lacking as the characters seem 1 dimensional because of the way they talk, it is an issue I also possess. You can shorten their sentences without adding extra words to make them fancier, it just takes a hit. Also, there was an unneeded use of advanced words when they could be more stable with basic-level words like "Smell and They" Also "was" being used in parts that could be avoided. Was is important but if you can change it for a better word you need to avoid it. Otherwise the plot was good as Im assuming this is one of your first novels, you will probably improve so good job. Ask me if you want me to review your later chapters, I will gladly check out your progress.
versatile superstar reference?