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Careless_036mthCommentedCh 50 Present- Careless_036mthCommentedCh 118 Mind Games, Motives and Teachings
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It. Was. Incredible.
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I honestly love his looks! It creates a great contrast between his power and looks. Do you have any images of him for reference?
Also, folks, I've noticed many people complaining about MC being described as "Femboy/Trans/Female" or other things, and I think that's quite bullshit. Lucian is a guy, and his appearance being feminine was for the plot. He represents the sin of lust and carries the divine beauty of Freya, much like Lord Krishna, who is also described as androgynous. Androgynous male doesn't equal a beta male, and feeling insecure about the mc not being masculine enough is unwarranted and stupid. So, please drop it. I appreciate masculinity, but not when it leads to shaming a character just because he's androgynous. However, I might write a "Masculine MC" in the future, who'll have the body of a bodybuilder. Look forward to that. - Careless_037mthCommented
It looks incredible! Great job!
(Also, please check the comments of this paragraph. I might leave a reference for the base here+) - Careless_037mthCommented
Maybe change it to Lucifer Morningstar or something similar. What better personification of sun is ther than the devil himself
I've considered Lucian Aeternus, but I'm looking for another suggestion. If you have a better name in mind, please suggest it. His in-game name will change. - Careless_039mthCommented
How is he doing this with his nose??
Feeling the hot, moist and long tongue of Usopp rampaging inside her mouth as it played with her tongue Kaya lost control of her mind for a few seconds due to shock and pleasure and using this opportunity to the fullest Usopp explored all the deepest recesses of her mouth with his tongue which he doubted even her brush had ever explored. - Careless_0310mthCommented
+1
2- Second is a one piece novel with mc transmigrating as Zoro, he will still be in luffy's crew and as cheat would be his future memories and strong body. - Careless_0311mthReplied to Brutality
Naw fr, How did you block out the words??
The boy smiled happily and waved at the Doctor kindly, the Doctor watched him go and waved, saying "Goodbye, ██████" the boy smiled, "Bye-Bye~!" as he left. - Careless_0311mthReplied to HellKing
Don’t worry they won’t be lovers. I ship Percabeth. If anything it’s more of a childhood crush.
She had only been practicing for three or so months, but when watching her it felt like she had been practicing her whole life. During spars, Marcus had to pit her against 7 and 8 years olds as she dominated anyone younger than that. The only person who could compete was Percy. He was also extremely talented at Karate, but unlike Jaya, he didn't put his whole heart into it. - Careless_0311mthCommented
This is honestly one of my favorite One Piece fanfictions and I absolutely adore the direction you are taking it. Please don't stop, I am thoroughly enjoying reading.
Thank you for reading my rant, and sorry if you haven't done any of what's been stated above. As for next chapter... it's indefinite as to when it's going to come out. Bye. - Careless_031yrPosted
It was an incredible book. At least the wind up was. The sorry leading up to the New World was great. Then as soon as the game shut off at around chapter 60, the book sharply decrease in quality. there were lots of story arcs and plots that never finished. The author also has huge time skips without explaining much, giving the character way too much power or way to little power to make sense for how long it was. Overall, it was a good read until the new world. It was built up on a solid foundation then the structure itself was built with sand rather than steel.
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Use a system like the one in ”Greatest of all time” it’ a system that rewards win with advanced protein shakes and he has like a mental scale where he can practice skills and such.
One question I'm unsure of is if the MC should have a system or not? What do you guys think? Should the mc have a system, and if so what should the system do in particular? - Careless_031yrReplied to kSyIeM
Currently reading it. it is very well written. It’s called “Reborn into Naruto World with Tenseigan”.
The idea is: A transmigrator takes on the body of Hyuga Neji who just died in the war and opens Tenseigan, chakra mode of Tenseigan directly takes the power to sixth path level, truth seeking orbs prove it, Toneri was weak since those weren't his eyes.