Please God capitalize your I's. Pull the entire book into word, control F I, uppercase shortcut, easy fix.

it was a good punch though.

omg there's a bang at the door

Comments like yours make something completely boring absolutely hilarious. The payoff between your first and second comments is perfect. Thanks for the laugh

That makes sense. but also ew

To begin, the story is well written/edited/has a relatively stable update period.After getting to chapter 400, I personally am struggling to just continue reading. My criticism mirrors others in that much of the background is left until we as readers are told. There isn't some groundbreaking investigation. Unfortunately, we as readers often have less information than the characters/primarily the main one. Regarding this information problem, the 'curse' and the Will don't make fucking sense. Which is basically intentional, however, while I do understand the authors intent, the existence of a 'curse' insinuates some form of rules/guidelines/punishment, even after 400 chapters we as readers don't know. I do not find this compelling, especially as it lends itself to arbitrarily plot lines. Much of the story is centered around the bad luck that the MC and his family are cursed with as a result of their ancestor maybe. The MC is constantly hampered, restricted, and railroaded to making reactive decisions. This means that the MC quickly becomes a vehicle of the plot. Throughout the story, there are several plot lines that just end/don't go anywhere. The family plot is dumb as shit and the trope will continue to be annoying. His entire family other than his brother dipped, it's unclear if they will actually return, all we know is the parents . Finally, the main character is dumb as a box of rocks. Dumb, stupid decisions are made, suffering abounds, thb it ultimately is draining.

Honestly...that's the bare minimum. I prefer personally emailing the author to educate them on the many forms of cursing.

the family just kinda sucks ngl.

It sounds more like a justification to have Marlo join the staff.

Cops literally beat vagrants as a sport in NY. especially if they are sleeping somewhere that the cops can justify a violent reminder.

idk, this chapter kinda annoyed me with two layers and it showed how...idk, it basically was Khan agreeing that he was/is a dog. Throw him a bone and he'll wag his tail literally. I honestly don't know if that's what you were going for. That ultimately making compromises is a way adults live and breathe in society and this represented Khan growing out of his immaturity but it still beggers belief that we're at the point where Khan, (the guy who uses the magic that literally has a pouting session when even the consideration of restricting freedom is had)is now compromising not once but twice in a day. Happily at that. It's honestly hard to see Khan of volume 1/2 here. Still, I'm not sure if that was the point and this is building up to chaos legitimately just snapping in a year of this, or if this is an actual trend.

This book makes it hard to like it at times. Similar to Elyons last book, this one also relies on reference humor, slapstick, and otherwise immature jokes. All of Cai's character can demonstrate how broken this story is. It, as the boar, is terrible. It does not care about its friends, it does not care for its family, it is simply greedy, shameless, and if, at some possible time, would definitely make light of every possible situation. But wait. Elyon says, 'I have the redeeming quality!' She wears a boar skin cause she likes to be...naked? and also wants to be like her father? but also she's actually really shy and so Cai isn't really a person but just concepts. She's a Recreation of multiple characters that Elyon has made before but smashed together to form an algamation. This type of character is a great example of this book in its entirety. Lux is simply Elyon's other MC but going thru his edgy phase. His powers work like the flash most of the time. Sometimes he's a 'brilliant" tactician, others he's falling into the most simplest of traps that even a baby could foretell. Another complaint would be how, similar to Elyon's other work, this MC is literally the dumpster of the Plot. All bad things must happen to him. He must also always be 'good' in comparison to his counterparts. In fact, Elyon believes that he didn't sell it well enough, so he has Lux be forced to build his guild on a compost hole. I'm mostly disappointed. Elyon could write a good book. He just has a habit of selfdestructing his story just to make some reference joke or other similar immature humor for the hell of it. It breaks the story and it never lands. The problem for reference humor is it just makes me want to switch over to THAT story being referenced instead. You ruin your story by placing an expiration date in your own book so it never becomes timeless. This is shown more clearly when you start making references to old memes like 'Dae wae'. I honestly don't understand the necessity for Elyon to have to hitch and steal other stories/lore to fit his own book. I get it its a crutch. But the previous leniency of being a 'new author' has worn off. You finished your first book. This book should show how much you've grown/evolved as an author. I don't hate what you're trying to do with characters that aren't cardboard, Cai and everyone else at the Stronghold/Campus are just in general lame. The MCs rival is an indisputable idiot. He's jealous of an orphan. I really can't say it any other way, he's stupid. His goals are one step away from being comic relief, and every single time he'd complain I'd laugh cause his character and arc are just that bad. He literally got so salty of Lux that he ditched the Stronghold cause the mere existence of any reference ti Lux drove him insane. Most of the other antagonists are comically supervilliany. Rapists, murders, arrogant despots, we got em all. Most are just that way cause they can be. Some of them have questionable family issues. All of them are annoying. His father is one of them. This may be a more personal gripe, but Alexander is a terrible father, and shit leader, and a worse person. He's self destructive(just like Cai), he doesn't know how to interact with other people his age or near it (just like Cai), he barely knows what a father is suppose to be other than a shield. I think I've noticed a pattern. The author doesn't understand people. He thinks they act some way for some reason, but he takes templates from other stories(more references), and slams them into his story and hopes that the jigsaw puzzle fits together with brute force. This is what really damns Elyons story. Characters are what make the story. They are what bring us back, they are the truly the first great place an author can show his imagination. Elyon can't do that/won't. The book is a book. It's readable. Don't expect anything more than you should. Don't think about the characters too much. Don't think about the plot too much. Ignore plot holes. I'd recommend read the story until you sigh three times in exasperation. Then drop it and go read something else.

Substituting emotions for emotions is literally the worst thing you can ever do when dealing with trauma. This books is poorly written for the most part, especially these early chapters so It's best to disregard anything they might be saying.

idk, it's been pretty well established at this point that any relationship with Monica requires a certain amount of Politicking. While a good amount of Premium readers hate Monica for whatever reason(Or expect her to die after every single death flag). We need some way Khan builds himself politically, or at least receives training. The name of the book(and currently known information) depicts a certain amount of Family/Heritage Rule when we eventually follow thru with Nak Map. TLDR, he's an adopted Prince, he needs to not be a country bumpkin/needs influence from the families/Royalty.

he's kinda just a creepy stalker.

he really opened the first gate over here.

jokes on you, she died last arc

crude over rude imo

I'm pretty sure once everything finally crashes, Khan will exit this Arc with for more moderation, especially regarding any form of relationship. With everything that has been foreshadowed, I can't imagine Khan not leaving the Harbor without looking either entering an extra edge phase or becoming super wishy washy.

eve really does have us looking over our shoulders every chapter. I'm expecting one of these couple moments to be interrupted by a surprise invasion.