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That's a good one.
Don't take my words too serious I'm just an average reader releasing my frustration on cliché scenes I dislike. I am sorry if I came off as aggressive in the first comment, I definitely could have wrote that more politely and appropriately. Don't let my negative comments influence your motivation to write, as my words can definitely sound like I'm insulting your skills. I know that it's your first novel and your improving as you go. And you definitely handled the situation with my comment amazingly. I hope you continue to write, as I enjoy the story and watching you improve as you go. Keep up the great work and don't let commenters like me frustrate you!
The previous scene where there faces where up close was pretty good. But this one just came out of no where and completely ruined the intense atmosphere that was being built. I think appropriate placement of this type of scene would be better. No need to get rid of them, just don't plug them in where they don't belong.
This is just disappointing 😞. I honestly am extremely tired of scenes like this. They are so cliché, overused, and add nothing good to the story other than a way to quickly progress the mc's relationship with a fl with no actual effort to story development, and second hand embarrassment to the reader. Cringy af. I expected better.😔
Honestly, the reunion senerio was handled so much better than I could have thought. It's such a great emotional scene that's well done and thought out. Moments like this that catch you off guard are what make high-quality stories. Good Work Author Entrail_JI 👏 making such an amazing story!💯😀👍
What are you doing Step-bro!?! sorry I had to.
No chapter at the promised time :(
It really was!