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SuvieDuvieDoo

SuvieDuvieDoo

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2022-03-02 JoinedAscension Island
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  • SuvieDuvieDoo
    SuvieDuvieDoo8mth
    Replied to Malignant

    Solid story bro! Grew up same place as the MC.

    I Can Claim Daily Rewards
    Urban · Malignant
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  • SuvieDuvieDoo
    SuvieDuvieDoo2yr
    Replied to SuvieDuvieDoo

    Probably going to wait for the time when this changes. It is too tiring for me.

    Cultivation Online
    Games · MyLittleBrother
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  • SuvieDuvieDoo
    SuvieDuvieDoo2yr
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    Concept is okay. But, I don't think that kind of MC is suitable for the world you are making. It is kind of contradicting especially if both the cultivation world and the VRMMORPG genre are combined into one. Which means people would very much likely climb up and push toward success. Even if they had a disability, they experienced a time where they were normal. Personally, I would go further beyond my capabilities if I had such capabilities and a genius. What we are seeing is like a slice of life that is not suitable in these situations. It is kind of off-putting. It just doesn't make sense for someone to just enjoy the world and not get tempted to become something more especially when you are disregarded after being in the limelight. Also, there are times when the MC make sense of things quickly and after a second becomes dunce after another and keeps questioning things. Hope there would be more consistency towards his behavior and growth. There are times where I mostly skip the slice of life stuff because I know he would just breeze through it. There is just no challenge. He is just showing off his talents while being oblivious of his surroundings at the same time. It's just tiring and not enjoyable. If one person is given the ability to do something more even within the game nobody would just sit back and let those talents rot in place especially when someone is crippled most their life. Just my own opinion though. I'm guessing more people would read this if the MC had more ambitions. I don't care if he is kind of naive at times and learning about the world. Being oblivious about everything while also having the ability to know and do more doesn't sit right with me. The MC clearly knows the way of the world. Again just my own opinion though.

    Cultivation Online
    Games · MyLittleBrother
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  • SuvieDuvieDoo
    SuvieDuvieDoo2yr
    Replied to Alekzi

    get an editor to fix grammatical errors mate.. you have a few books already that you have posted. Surely enough, even basic grammatical errors should be fixed since you already have much experience.

    White Online
    Games · Alekzi
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  • SuvieDuvieDoo
    SuvieDuvieDoo2yr
    Posted

    uhm ain't nobody gonna talk about the grammar I'm this book? "he is boy" "is here gun?"Just typing these phrases is making my skin crawl....

    White Online
    Games · Alekzi
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