This line is good, but punctuation needs adding "We can't help! We're restricted to help or interrupt (I might change interrupt to interfere but you do you) in the world." The woman explained, whimpering.

Lil comma here 'I'm a god, my son'

This bits a little unclear. Maybe try 'the light pointed directly towards him' ?

*pierced, because you use the word after

The storyline is excellent, it gives great attention to the importance of each character and shows how well connected they are to the world, if that makes sense. The character designs are incredible and if I could give more than five stars for character design I absolutely would!

I AM PROUD OF YOU AS WELL FENRIR

Oooh I love this paragraph