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Hyper_E10mthReplied to carlos435Just read my Naruto Zenchogan series if you can't stand the terrible punctuation and grammar in my first-ever novel.
Hey Naruto-kun, stated Hinata while fidgeting. So you are a princess huh, must be a nice life, Naruto stated. I'm always forced to train and treated badly compared to my younger sister because of skill, Hinata stated in a sad tone. Oh, I never realized, stated Naruto. That must suck, also the ranking system and the forehead thingy are so unfair. I swear when I'm Hokage, I'll change the Hyuga ways for the better. Both Hinata and Naruto were flustered and ate Ramen together before Hinata rushed home because she secretly escaped, however, you cannot hide from the Byakugan. She wasn't allowed to talk to Naruto again, however, they always interact with one another in the Academy at later ages.- Hyper_E1yrReplied to 2Cool4SchoolCh 2 Bells
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I know, but I'm going to talk about in later parts why Naruto progressed so much. Lets just say the Reaper Death Seal is involved in this.
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First of all, it's my spin on this story. Moreover, KCM2 Naruto is way stronger than Hiruzen. Hiruzen pushed back Kurama because of the monkey weapon thingy(This was 12 yrs ago). Plus, when did I say Kakashi is stronger than Hiruzen? You don't have to be on the same level to know how strong someone is. It also doesn't matter that Hiruzen pushed Kurama because he did not damage him and would have got clapped by him if not for Minato. Moreover, a jinchuuriki increases the power of their tailed beast by a huge margin. Naruto was in KCM2, and he has decay. He can speed blitz Hiruzen and its gg's, he doesn't even need decay. Kakashi has seen Hiruzen fight during the Kyuubi attack on the village. If you want to debate, fix your grammar first.
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I shut down his brain casually, giving him a painless death. - Hyper_E2yrPosted
This was very interesting. I hope you continue. I enjoyed the fact that you were creative by using the idea of Ten to defend yourself so he can use his quirks, you were very creative. I wonder if you could maybe allow him to combine Nen with QUirk, so he can use Ten and his Quirk to defend himself, almost like an ultimate defense, basically like Gaaras Sand armor, but it's with creation flames. Otherwise, I enjoyed this and I hope you continued.