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Anything less than perfect is suffering?
I meant, what did he lose during this scene to act this agitated lol He is already living a life much better than his past one
or like you know, give him some time to adjust. It's just the second chapter lol
I would suggest checking out some google articles on paragraph spacing, and punctuation.
21 is still too young for marriage , silly father!
oh or you can just ease her nervousness by getting close to her
eh what a scum
Besides a really good start, one thing I like is the thought author placed into doing the world-building. The names of characters sound Greek, and werewolves were also known to originate from there in some myths. Can't wait to learn more about this cool world!
The synopsis had me interested at first, but the first few chapters dwelled too much on irrelevant details. None of them even serve any purpose from what I can see. It would have been better if Geumbi transmigrated by the end of the first chapter at least. It's also a little hard to continue reading because of the language. I would suggest the author spend more time reading and writing to get a better understanding of the language. All in all, consistency is still the key. So, as long as you try hard and do not give up, all the while continuing to learn and grow, things are bound to become better. Best of luck for your writing, author-nim ^^
'ye' appears foreign in a Korean setting tbh
Has Geumbi grown up in another country?
You can avoid repeating Geumbi again and again but using 'she' T-T
on her*
This story starts very interestingly. Overall the plot is promising and carries good potential. Looking ahead to how it ends ^^ The only thing that can be improved is the language, but that isn't a serious issue either. All the best for future chapters, and keep uploading because the concept is pretty nice ^^