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may be this ?
Fine, just fine. Of course, I would like to praise the actor for such an idea , the grammar is very good, but there is something that can be improved. The idea is taken from another story , but to change and a lot of changes is better, but one minus the events unfold too quickly, and the background of the hero is not so clear, I think you can add a few details to clarify. Basically a great story, I think the author will continue to continue.
It was boring without your work, well, another day...