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Hi there! Thanks for visiting my page! My name is Chaotic Sunshine and I Romance stories. I love black cats and love walking my dogs on the beach.

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ChaoticSunshine3 years ago
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Sorry, please tell me to stop if you don’t want me to check things like that
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Urban · Rayne_Rue
ChaoticSunshine3 years ago
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A great chapter! I like the banter between the friends! I would just just the grammar to help the flow of your story.
Ch 1 Chapter 3
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Urban · Rayne_Rue
ChaoticSunshine3 years ago
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Full stop inside speech marks. “What you saying? I know.”
"Looks like somebody got lucky".
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Urban · Rayne_Rue
ChaoticSunshine3 years ago
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Check you sentence here. It needs to be broken up a bit. How could he be so cruel as to leave me for someone else? I didn’t realise that I was sobbing until a little girl came and wiped my tears away. She bent down and whispered something in my ear…
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Urban · Rayne_Rue
ChaoticSunshine3 years ago
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Friends do feel awkward in this situation!
He hasn't brought up any news about Emir and honestly I think he knows everything about his friend but he just didn't want to bring it up to me, I hope he doesn't either because the news of Emir will break me down even though, I try at any cost to avoid the media but I know one day this will break me into pieces when I come to know about his tendencies.
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Urban · Rayne_Rue
ChaoticSunshine3 years ago
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The way you capture emotion is really amazing.
Ch 1 Chapter: 2
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Urban · Rayne_Rue
ChaoticSunshine3 years ago
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Just check your grammar on this line. The speech marks are in the wrong place.
"It's just hard for me, not to Jay I loved him so much and you know it I sigh "
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Urban · Rayne_Rue
ChaoticSunshine3 years ago
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Yes, yes you will !!!
I wonder what will happen to me in the future, will I be able to find love and happiness again, will I be able to move on again?
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Urban · Rayne_Rue
ChaoticSunshine3 years ago
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Oh my goodness, you manage to capture emotion so well. It is like that, everything reminds you of them!
It's hard to do things without thinking of him because everywhere I look just reminds me of him, every song I listen to brings back the memories of us dancing and laughing for no specific reason. am intruded by the song coming from my TV it's called "To let somebody go by Coldplay ft Selena Gomez "
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Urban · Rayne_Rue
ChaoticSunshine3 years ago
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Love the first chapter, really pulls on the heart strings. I would just check the editing on one or two parts. :)
Ch 1 Chapter 1
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Urban · Rayne_Rue

The Mafia Boss and his Lost Princess

Kurt Blackwood is a powerful and rich gang syndicate chairman. He had everything he wanted, apart from love. After getting over being rejected by another woman three years ago, he was ready to find his true soul mate. He was on the verge of giving up before a twist of fate led him to meet Alannah. Alannah found her way into the underground fighting scene in order to pay her brother’s gambling debts. She had no interest in love. In fact, it is a dangerous distraction that could get her killed. Can Kurt persuade Alannah to let her defences down and give love a chance? Welcome to the Syndicate world, where the course of love never runs smoothly. Passions run high and love could very well just get you killed...

ChaoticSunshine · Urban

4.8

59 Chs

Mafia King’s Teacher

Lisa felt Matto's hand release her arms as the other slowly moved down her body, in her underwear. "Why didn’t you stay with me this morning, Amoreco? Did I not fully satisfy you?"Matto said softly as he began to tease her. Lisa gasped as she could feel her heartbeat faster, as sparks of pleasure began to form. "I asked you a question, Amoreco, and I expect an answer!" Matto Maldonado was used to having women throw themselves at him. After all, not only was he rich, but he was also a powerful Brazilian gang leader. That was how it had always been. That was until a brave school teacher, Lisa Mitchell, saved him from an assassination attempt and turned his world upside down. While Matt felt an instant connection, Lisa made it clear that she was not interested! She is too busy looking after her deaf younger sister to have her nights filled with passion. Can Matto persuade Lisa to give him a chance? Even if Matto does, can Lisa accept Matto’s position as leader of the notorious Brazilian Sun God Gang? Or has Lisa got her own secrets that will cause chaos in Matto’s world? One thing is for sure, Matto is going to do everything in his power to make this feisty and sexy school teacher his!

ChaoticSunshine · Urban

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12 Chs