jsjalchemy

Hey all! Author here, hope you could take a few seconds to write a quick review on your opinions and how you feel about the story! We'd appreciate everything :>

thank you for the support !😁

Obviously as the author had pointed out, there are quite a few grammar mistakes and weird sentence structures to each chapter, however it's not so bad to the point where you can't understand what is happening in the story. There's not much to talk on, other than updates and some writing issues, I do hope more people can come to know this novel so the author will be motivated to release more content. It's a pretty nice read. I quite like the characters introduced. The interactions between Rai and Mark, it just seemed natural between friends. And when the author decides to do fixes, it will only get better. I'd like to talk about the system too, I'm not particularly into the genre so I don't know much, but I do like the aspect of having ratios and numerical values to determine how the system works as well as each character's capabilities within the world, for example, Rai's mana recovery rate. The content surrounding that is balanced so that even I, inept at Math, can still gauge the values and know what's good and what's bad. As for world-building, I find it intriguing that the planet may have been transported elsewhere, as I like huge background mysteries like that. Just seems very cool. As well as the gaming aspect of levelling up by hunting SO critters, meditation and such, I find that you were able to integrate these things into real life situations pretty well. Although the grammar mistakes are a slight turn off and make me scratch my head at times, it still gets the point across. TL;DR. It's good despite it's current flaws, imagine what it'll be like when it's edited out and with more content! Keep it up! Adding to coll :D

On a roll. I am invested in the relationships the female lead may experience! The dialogue can be cute and its heart-warming when it is. Chapters are decently paced, albeit a little short, grammar could use some work but nonetheless it does not impede readers from understanding what is going on. Story progression is smooth as well! Like it!

thank you for the kind words!

An amazing piece of work. Each chapter you write has such a way with words that gives multiple meanings and makes me think and understand, before I continue on. You always make sure to give elaborations and take your time to explain in each thought. Finding the right words and right combination to produce a profound paragraph that holds a lot of value and making it eye-catching enough. There may be some typos here and there, but nothing that makes the story any less comprehensible. Good work!

a beautiful description. love it

I quite like this. The technique of piecing together information and creative parts about the story gets me going. Makes the story-telling flow and enjoyable.