Rulox28

Its the wrong chapter

I really like this arc

No creo que la comedia sea el punto fuerte de la historia pero aún así no ha estado mal hasta el momento en el que el prota ha actuado de manera un poco estúpida rompiendo básicamente su única fuente de dinero por una tontería como esa , una posible escucha cuando podría simplemente venderlos para deshacerse de ellos. Pero por lo demás bien, aunque no me guste que el protagonista actúe de manera un poco tan estúpidamente comica podríamos decir, porque no coincide con como se ha mostrado hasta ahora.

please increase the protagonist’s intelligence. Up to now the protagonist is as average as it gets. All the intelligence you’ve shown is really just prior knowledge he already had and a little bit of basic deduction. Improve his intelligence by showing some feat, some plan, some smarter countermeasure than simply leaving a hairpin that works as a signal in case something bad happens. Anything could have happened between the moment he detects something and the moment he acts, and he wouldn’t have been able to do anything. Raise his intelligence a bit and I won’t mind the plot getting complicated, because at least I’ll know the protagonist can respond to it. I wouldn’t like you to have to rely on plot armor or conveniently random situations that benefit the protagonist. Best regards, and I hope you continue what you’re doing, even if sometimes I don’t agree with the decisions you make.

Thanks for the reply. I want to clarify a couple of things I think you may have misunderstood. When I talk about Sukuna’s fights against the Raikage or against Yagura, I’m not complaining that he wins; I’m complaining about why he wins by such a narrow margin when he has such powerful techniques. I mean, wouldn’t it be better if, one way or another, you temporarily limited him—by his own choice—to make the battle close? He has one of the most powerful techniques in the Naruto world and yet it feels like he fights and struggles like crazy to pull off combinations that, in my opinion, seem obvious. Using the Flying Thunder God together with Kamui for a quick, heavy hit, or using Sukuna’s abilities in combination with Kamui’s intangibility to land guaranteed blows whenever he wants. And why do you use certain characteristics of Sukuna’s powers but not others? I mean, the stronger version of his “Shrine” attack that requires contact is much more powerful than the long-range version—I agree—but it doesn’t require prolonged contact or anything like that; it just requires a simple touch. I don’t understand why you seem to want to limit him in certain aspects but boost him in others, when it would be better to establish a baseline for everything. In other words, don’t overbuff certain abilities if you’re then going to nerf others. As for the reincarnators, of course I understand there’s only one reincarnator from Earth. If there were more than one, I would have stopped reading this story a long time ago. But I don’t agree with there being so many Jujutsu Kaisen reincarnators, even though it’s your decision how many to introduce. What I don’t like is that you seem to give too much importance to chaos. I prefer uncertainty. I mean, I’m not interested in having 25 characters running around, each doing their own individual subplots. Having a couple that slightly change the story to give it a new twist seems fine to me, but do it in another way. For that, create an original story. At the end of the day, you’re going to put a lot of effort into it, and my opinion won’t come across that well. All that said, I applaud you for giving me a fairly complete and fast response to my review, while always staying respectful, which is what I also try to do. As a final note, I have to say that one of the last things you mentioned—the justification for certain actions, like not killing Danzō at the beginning—doesn’t seem like a fair comparison to me, because you say there’s a reason behind it, but that’s not true; you created that reason after the fact, or honestly, it wasn’t a very good reason from the start. I mean, keeping Danzō alive so the massacre can happen doesn’t seem necessary to me when you’ve forced certain situations later on without needing all the facts to remain the same—for example, again, the bridge mission where Zabuza appears, which should have been a totally altered future, and yet you forced that narrative. You could have done the same with the Uchiha massacre. I think you hide behind certain justifications when they aren’t really necessary, and you argue that they are, and on that point I disagree. It’s your point of view that they’re necessary, but as the author you don’t have to make them strictly necessary, and you’ve proven that yourself. At the end of the day, you’re the one who decides whether certain events become a butterfly effect that changes what will happen, or whether certain events will happen no matter what happens before or what you change. So it seems a bit unfair to say that Danzō’s death couldn’t happen earlier when, again, you’ve changed very important things and then there are events that still happen—if not in exactly the same way, then in a very similar way. And please, one last request. This isn’t my opinion; it’s a personal request. Please, if you’re going to add more Jujutsu Kaisen characters and start to tangle up the plot—tying knots and making it much more complicated—please increase the protagon

Filler

What a mix of names...

Here’s a long review. First, I have to say that this story has started to disappoint me a bit in the last few chapters, mainly for two reasons. First, I like crossovers, okay? Between two series, two stories. And in this case specifically, Naruto with Jujutsu Kaisen, because I like seeing a familiar system, a familiar world—Naruto—with a change that makes it feel fresher when revisiting the story; in this case, Sukuna. The problem is that I don’t like bringing in more characters besides Sukuna. One, or maybe at most two who are close to the protagonist, would be fine. But when you turn it into a Jujutsu Kaisen inside Naruto, I stop enjoying it, because it’s not what I came to read—mainly because of the premise. The premise is simple: Sukuna in the Naruto world, period. Adding more characters makes that premise much more complex, and then the story’s development and how those characters are handled becomes much harder. And if on top of that you plan to add new characters by replacing the dynamic you’ve been introducing for 100 chapters, it doesn’t convince me. The other thing I don’t like is how the plot and the character development are being handled. I don’t like the plot development because I feel that, many times, what the protagonist does has no real consequences. For example, it takes many chapters for him to kill Danzō, when he could have done it from the beginning. If you didn’t want to kill him at first, then don’t give him the opportunity and later make him regret it. In my opinion, that’s lazy writing, not a brilliant decision by the author. And yet, when he does things that truly change the story, I feel they lack the weight they should really have. For example, he kills the Raikage and it seems like there are no real repercussions. I mean, I’m fine with it not having many consequences, because what I want to see is the protagonist doing the things I’d like him to do—taking matters into his own hands. But I feel the way you steer the plot is a bit forced. You lean too heavily on the butterfly effect because of the protagonist, and I feel that makes the protagonist have more influence on what happens in the story when he isn’t there than when he is. Or the battle against Yagura, which spirals out of control far too quickly, but then everything gets resolved very easily. If you’re going to create a problem that big, at least justify how the protagonist manages to avoid the repercussions. That would be good. And since we’re on the topic of the Yagura battle, I hated seeing how the protagonist’s power goes out of control in every direction. You’ve established from the beginning a power framework where Sukuna is at kage level and can reach a high level due to his strong offensive power, but he can’t compete against anything above that. And in fact, he has certain disadvantages depending on the technique. I don’t mind that, but the protagonist has all the memories of the original Sukuna. That alone is extremely valuable, because it allows him to reach that level with some time and imagination to cover the gaps he has compared to the original. The problem is that after so much time and so many ways the protagonist has used to become much, much stronger than he should have been with only the original Sukuna’s powers, you still drag him downward. For example, Obito could handle a lot of things by abusing Kamui. Yet Sukuna, with a ton of techniques and a ton of creativity and imagination when using binding vows, can only take advantage of a small part of all the abilities he has, and he uses them separately. He doesn’t combine truly broken abilities with each other—or at least it doesn’t seem like it—because the results are weak compared to what they should be. I also don’t like the progression of his strength at all; it feels overly segmented. Suddenly he masters a technique, suddenly he learns to use something new, suddenly he does something else he shouldn’t be able to do. For example, he recreates the Kamo clan’s cursed technique, and yet it’s emphasized that it’s useless for combat and that he used it to improve his accuracy and his control of cursed energy. And yet, in the next major fight against Yagura, it’s pointed out that his strongest offensive ability fails him or isn’t as useful as it could be due to lack of use. He devoted a huge amount of time to a technique that isn’t useful beyond training, but not to his strongest offensive technique. And then the fights. I feel that instead of elevating the characters, you drag them down. To put it simply: in a fight—for example, in Jujutsu Kaisen—you don’t highlight the characters’ mistakes; you highlight their combat ability, their battle IQ, and they pull out new techniques, new forms, and strategies that let them overcome their opponent or cover their shortcomings. But here I feel it’s the opposite. All you do is highlight the flaws in the characters’ techniques. Sukuna has X technique and uses it against his opponent; however, because of X deficiency, it isn’t as useful as it could be in an ideal situation. I think it should be the other way around: you should highlight strategies, tactics, and battle intelligence to explain why a character can’t do something. Lastly, I think the most important thing that’s been bothering me lately is the plot progression. Honestly, it doesn’t interest me at all. I mean, you play your secret games, your plans, your schemes, and I don’t think they’re inherently bad, but I find them a bit disappointing. Some secret plans feel too obvious, while other things feel too secret: they get revealed all at once, and even if they were planned, they feel too convenient. The masked man, mysterious situations that lead to new details added to the story that give it depth… it’s not bad, but it works when an author like Gege Akutami does it, because he creates spectacular stories. But you’re not on that level. Don’t get me wrong: it’s not an insult; I just think you’re aiming above your league. By trying to create such a spectacular plot, I think the story suffers, because you could tell a much more entertaining story with a more linear plot. Not everything has to be spectacular. At least I’m not here for that—especially because by aiming too high you create shortcomings, because, honestly, you don’t have that much writing skill, even though you’re improving. An example of this, in my opinion, is your decision not to give the protagonist chakra. At first, I didn’t think it was a bad idea. After all, it allowed you to develop the power system more and ultra-specialize it so the protagonist would be heavily focused on his own power and reach new heights that wouldn’t have been reached in the original story—allowing what was originally a peak kage-level power to perhaps surpass its limits and face the strongest characters that appear at the end. In the end, the goal of every story like this—at least in my view—is for the protagonist to surpass the original stories it draws from and reach a new level, especially by the end. However, not long after the story begins, we find out he can perform and use certain techniques. Again, I don’t think that’s so bad, but when he suddenly can use Kamui or the Flying Thunder God, even if it required a lot of practice that—surprise—we haven’t seen, I think you’re underusing his capabilities. After all, he has learned two of the most difficult techniques. Yes, one has a trick and the other required a lot of study, practice, and binding vows, but I feel he could aim much higher and improve both his own techniques and his potential. After all, he starts from a lower base than the Naruto world’s limits, but the story doesn’t focus on any of that; it focuses on very momentary utility. I mean, abilities in these kinds of power systems are usually the classic case where one plus one isn’t two, but more. Using the Flying Thunder God and Kamui should create a synergy that pushes him beyond what the individual techniques can do. Minato reached kage level—and very strong within that level—using only that technique and its versatility. I understand the protagonist isn’t at that level yet, but in exchange he has Kamui, one of the most broken techniques in all of Naruto, which he uses quite smoothly thanks partly to training and partly to the amount of experience he already has using it. Even if you emphasize that he sometimes lacks experience, he has already used it more than Obito did. Obito fought very few times, and a lot of the power he gains comes from tricks, not from his own ability. And yet, with the Flying Thunder God, Kamui, healing, and invisible magical slashes, it was incredibly hard for him to defeat the Raikage. Honestly, it doesn’t make sense. I would have preferred him to be more limited, with a stronger justification. But no: he faces a kage-level opponent and, even with three kage-level tools, he barely defeats him, only thanks to the healing trick that lets him fight far above his level in that situation. At that point, his healing is far more important than any of his other techniques. In the end, that fight would have played out exactly the same if he had relied only on healing and hand-to-hand combat. And don’t say otherwise, because in the end it’s your own writing that decides the situation. And as if that weren’t enough, the kage he fights is limited by a time limit and chakra usage because of an insect. So how are you going to make the protagonist reach the power levels needed to face truly dangerous threats in the Naruto world if, after years and years of development, stealing ridiculously broken techniques, and supposedly smart use of all the resources at his disposal, he can barely handle one of the weakest kages shown in the original story? What’s his path of evolution going to be? To wrap up: I don’t dislike the story, but I feel I’ve lost that initial excitement of wanting to read one more chapter and then another and then another. Now I find myself skimming through the chapter somewhat unenthusiastically, just wanting to know what happens next, but often feeling frustrated with certain decisions without being able to fully express it because there are other things I do like. In other words, you don’t completely fail, but I feel you don’t really hit the mark either. As I mentioned, I feel you’re aiming a bit too high. Set slightly lower goals. Make the story’s development a bit more linear. Nobody is going to crucify you for that. But when you set goals that are too high and hype up readers, all you achieve is that when you inevitably can’t meet those expectations, the reader gets disappointed—which is what I feel is happening to me. At the beginning of the story, it really stood out—at least that was my impression—that the protagonist had a lot of potential for growth, because he wasn’t just using his ability to imitate Sukuna; he was developing something completely new on his own, and on top of that he was using some of the most broken, powerful tools in Naruto. But hundreds and hundreds of chapters have passed, and yes, the protagonist is very strong, but I feel many of the feats he accomplishes could have been achieved much earlier with a bit more intelligence and planning. In the end, a conveniently placed blow in certain situations would have been far more effective than the whole battle that unfolds. I understand you also want to give the story excitement with satisfying battles, but not at the expense of the foundations that were already established. One last thing I wanted to mention, which I forgot earlier: if you’re going to change the story—which I don’t think is a bad decision—don’t overuse recycled situations from the original story, like the whole bridge mission and the Mist arc. Conveniently, certain battles end up unfolding exactly like in the original story, and yet you change the situation completely, but the protagonist forces everything to develop in a similar way when he could have achieved a much earlier development on his own. Instead, everything gets delayed for convenient situations, justifying an accumulation of training and experience that allows explosive power jumps—things that aren’t really necessary in the original story, and yet here they seem like a minimum requirement. But overall, I’ll try to keep reading the story, even if it’s hard at times.

I feel the same

Shit argument