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See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

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I'm making the first comment of the first episode. I wish the author good luck in writing this new adventure. Do your best and don't worry about what people are saying. Every beautiful thing has its dislikers. Your previous book was one of the best story driven stories on this site.

The story is progressing well as far as I've read. As someone who loved the author's previous book, I look forward to what will happen. As in your previous book, it is obvious that you care about world-building and I don't have a problem at the moment. There aren't many characters for now, but I like the people who appear. I hope you can write them like living people. And I know you can because I loved the characters in your previous book. If there are things I want to point out, I think you can make artificial intelligence talk less. He's a cute character, but the two of them talk a little too long sometimes. And I want the wars to be short but exciting. The battles in his previous book were good, but sometimes they could get too long. Personally, I loved it, but some people get bored. I guess that's it, I hope you tell the story you want to tell, as long as you write, I want to see the end of your stories.( Sorry for bad grammer)

Thanks for the chapter Author. Keep up to good work.

The story is progressing well as far as I've read. As someone who loved the author's previous book, I look forward to what will happen. As in your previous book, it is obvious that you care about world-building and I don't have a problem at the moment. There aren't many characters for now, but I like the people who appear. I hope you can write them like living people. And I know you can because I loved the characters in your previous book. If there are things I want to point out, I think you can make artificial intelligence talk less. He's a cute character, but the two of them talk a little too long sometimes. And I want the wars to be short but exciting. The battles in his previous book were good, but sometimes they could get too long. Personally, I loved it, but some people get bored. I guess that's it, I hope you tell the story you want to tell, as long as you write, I want to see the end of your stories.( Sorry for bad grammer)

Nice chapter Author. Btw current cover better than before. But i think you shouldn't change too much.

No problem [img=recommend]

Author maybe you should add illustration of the characters in comments to for the browser readers.