CosmicRuler
I Rule the Cosmos the world is only a speck of dust in my eyes for the galaxies bow before me
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CosmicRuler9mthReplied to MaxReadimma fix it
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my guy i thank you so much for this i guess righting so much zeros makes you forget basic math hehe
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Remove > (that he had taken the honey buns)
"Ah shit" Cam muttered knowing his time for pain was but a few feet away and scrambled to hide the evidence that he had taken the honey-buns, but it was too late as he was spotted. Tyrone stomped towards Cam till his chest was inches away from touching Cam's head and then Tyrone lifted him up and held him against the wall making sure the cockroach couldn't scurry off. "Hey man we can talk about this." Cam pleaded - CosmicRuler10mthCommented
Knowing his time for pain was (but a few feet away and scrambled to hide the evidence) < remove this and add this > (mere moments away he skittered across his sell like a rat to hide the evidence) add some humor to the thing
"Ah shit" Cam muttered knowing his time for pain was but a few feet away and scrambled to hide the evidence that he had taken the honey-buns, but it was too late as he was spotted. Tyrone stomped towards Cam till his chest was inches away from touching Cam's head and then Tyrone lifted him up and held him against the wall making sure the cockroach couldn't scurry off. "Hey man we can talk about this." Cam pleaded - CosmicRuler10mthCommented
But it wasn't long before cam and the other inmates heard the ( what can only be called the) < remove this its not nectary But it wasnt long before cam and the other inmates heard the (wrathful voice) < add this
But it wasn't long before Cam and the other inmates heard the what can only be called the wrath of a mad man who just got his food stolen " Who the fuck took my buns cause they bout to get beatin to the end of time n back." - CosmicRuler10mthCommented
Remove (the), from the part where you said he had stolen (the) Tyrone's honey bun
In the prison cafeteria Cam was enjoying what could or rather would be called his last meal, even though he wasn't on death row he had done something unforgivable, he had stolen the Tyrone's honey-buns, but he just couldn't help himself with the allure of the soft donutty texture mixed with cinnamon and finished with a glaze of icing, ah the thought gave Cam shivers. - CosmicRuler1yrCommentedCh 57 [54] THE PAST...
- CosmicRuler1yrCommented
bro has stamina of OVER 9000!!
In a place filled with magma and the aura of destruction, a teenager was having s*x with more than twenty thousand women looked up in the sky and a strange yet mysterious smile appeared on his face, but he shook his head and continued to thrust his hips. - CosmicRuler1yrReplied to 002_Yuki_Onna
- CosmicRuler1yrPosted
You need to work on details and repeating words isn't a good thing because it sounds repetitive be clearer with the world and its background. The first chapter needs some fixing I'm confused remember even if it makes the chapter a bit boring add details. But all that aside its a good book and would definitely recommend and waiting to see more i the future hehehe
- CosmicRuler1yrCommented
fix it NOW!!
Crossing thousands of moments in her mind. They burned every ounce of heart. Tears ran through her cheek. - CosmicRuler1yrCommented
a screen appeared over head witch said [GAME OVER]
"LUE!! RUN!!" someone screamed, as the sword went inside out. A letter in which it's written: "GAME OVER". - CosmicRuler1yrCommented
as the sword pierced her chest
"LUE!! RUN!!" someone screamed, as the sword went inside out. A letter in which it's written: "GAME OVER". - CosmicRuler1yrCommented
As her head throbbed from pain she closed her eyes and rested her hands on her aching head.
Her head is aching, she closed her eyes as she put her hands on it. - CosmicRuler1yrCommented
the entire things needs fixing but its good so far
Forcing her eyes to focus, she looked around, its raining, she took a step ahead and an arrow came straight marching towards her eye, she rolled the other side, and the arrow passed scratching her cheeks. She ran and ran and ran, her chest is in a storm and her mind a mess. Huffing, sweating, dashing into trees. The arrows keep coming. Ankle twisted, she rolled down, and her muscles react, not fast enough this time. The arrow skids across her right calf. It almost felt like her leg is on fire. Trying to remove herself from the horror. - CosmicRuler1yrCommented
bro fix it
With eyes still groggy from sleep or whatever. She is feeling weak, she relies on all her other senses to comprehend where she is, but she has no idea. She gather all her strength in her arms and pushed the ground to stand up. She was wobbling, her eyesight was becoming more clear, and as she became more alert, it only takes a few seconds to work out why this is. - CosmicRuler1yrReplied to TrashNovel337
yes remove it and use the one that i have
Butler John: "Young Master James your food ready to eat while knocking at the door."