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  • Unkown1011
    Unkown10112yr
    Commented

    Oh s**t. Don't be sorry pal your health and future is more important. Take care of yourself and good luck in school.

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  • Unkown1011
    Unkown10112yr
    Commented

    You okay? You haven't posted a chapter for a while.

    Ch 10 Dungeon Grinding.
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  • Unkown1011
    Unkown10112yr
    Commented

    When will you update?

    Ch 11 Prisoners of love.
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  • Unkown1011
    Unkown10112yr
    Commented

    It's kinda weird that you're putting finn and fire princess together. Yes he loves her but as the series goes on, he accepts that she moved on and is okay being friends. They broke up because finn abused her trust on him, legitimately got hurt by the fake messages he wrote. Just because he liked seeing ice king getting beat up by fire princess. Because of this and other events finn grows as a person, learns how a relationship works and became someone who is willing to listen first before fighting. At the beginning he was the cliche hero that fights first and saves the day. He was naive and sometimes insensitive for example when jake was sick he forced mr. fox to kiss ms. duck. Almost willingly kill a bunch of baby birds, just to give jake a epic story. But as the series goes on he learns and slowly matured into the hero he saw himself to be and wanted. I'm not saying this just because I don't like them being together, but because I liked them being a couple when adventure time was still beginning but I understood why they broke up and I accepted it. Please don't force this ship.

    Ch 8 Zombie party.
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  • Unkown1011
    Unkown10112yr
    Posted

    This is great. It has a few grammar issues that doesn't affect the story too much. The characters in it act like in the show almost perfectly. Highly recommend.

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  • Unkown1011
    Unkown10112yr
    Commented

    Great chapter. But I suggest removing the % in the relationship status as it is unnecessary. And put the character's name beside there dialogue so readers know who is speaking. For example. Finn: You know what time it is? Jake: It's ADVENTURE TIME!

    Ch 11 Prisoners of love.
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  • Unkown1011
    Unkown10112yr
    Replied to Daichi_TBR193

    So is there a chance that your ben 10 fic will update in March or April?

    Ch 10 Goodbye and Good Riddance Vilgax
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    Ben 10: Apex Hero
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  • Unkown1011
    Unkown10112yr
    Replied to Daichi_TBR193

    You're visiting the USA? Be careful they're kinda not doing a good job in trying to stop the virus. But besides that have fun pal! So what's next when you update your naruto fic?

    Ch 10 Goodbye and Good Riddance Vilgax
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    Ben 10: Apex Hero
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  • Unkown1011
    Unkown10112yr
    Replied to Daichi_TBR193

    I have a question. Which of your stories are you currently working on?

    Ch 10 Goodbye and Good Riddance Vilgax
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    Ben 10: Apex Hero
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  • Unkown1011
    Unkown10112yr
    Replied to Daichi_TBR193

    It's okay. Oh also can I give you a suggestion? The omnitrix transforms ben into aliens right? Now the question is where's his clothes? Well the omnitrix probably stores it. So when his messing with the omnitrix or uses his knowledge of ben 10. His able to store things in his omnitrix and instantly "equip" it or store it. So because of this... HERO CUSTOME TIME! Ben makes a costume to keep his identity safe plus he gets a cool costume. Or armour depends what you want to use. And there's probably voice commands for the omnitrix? So he can give a command to the omnitrix to store this. It will only "equip" the costume when ben says "IT'S HERO TIME" and it will store it again when he says "SHOW'S OVER". Also this gif.

    Ch 10 Goodbye and Good Riddance Vilgax
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    Ben 10: Apex Hero
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  • Unkown1011
    Unkown10112yr
    Commented

    When will you update this? It's great! The characters even act like the ones in the show and how the reacted to our ben is so in there character. Though grandpa max should be given some more screen time since his character right now is kinda bland currently. I hope this is not dropped since it is so good and has a lot of potential that it's a waste to drop it. You did a good job with this though there's a few spelling mistakes but it's insignificant enough that it didn't ruin the story. There's some words that repeat but those are rare enough that the story is not affected by it.

    Ch 10 Goodbye and Good Riddance Vilgax
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    Ben 10: Apex Hero
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