Sniperwoof
I create and translate novels and share them with people like me who just love novels with a passion. I hope to gain experience and publish my own novel someday. Patreon - www.patreon.com/Sniperwoof
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When will he stop being so Emo and all.
Do this. After you've finished writing, open your note app and copy/paste the chapter you've written there. Then, select the Grammarly keyboard and you'll find that it's giving you suggestions for things you need to change. Just click on that and let it change the words according to it's suggestions and see if that feels better than the original. That help a lot. And if all of that also doesn't help with the grammar, just use AI to correct the chapter grammatically. Also, these kind of novels should be written in 3rd person PoV not the First person. Explaining your actions while doing or performing an act feels a bit weird to read. Doing these will definite improve the overall novel quality. Thanks.
Are you stupid or what? He's not calling Allah 'Yahweh'. Yahweh is a seperate God, the god of the Israelites. Nobody is calling Allah 'Yahweh' so stop crying about it. He literally said 'and the like'. It's simple English, not even that complicated. What are you even on about?
To the Muslim's above. Please try to understand that he's just stating this in general and trying to be inclusive. You don't have to take this personally and make this about yourself. There are other religions as well, apart from Islam, and those religions have their own gods that they believe in. Trying to argue about One True God or whose belief is correct is pointless because everyone is entitled to their own beliefs and you believing/thinking otherwise doesn't change a thing or make other's belief wrong. Also, I just request everybody, regardless of their religion, to please be respectful and inclusive of others and not impose their beliefs on anyone else. Thank You.
He's not writing this for Muslims specifically. He's saying that in general. There are other religions out there as well, you know? Those with other Gods they worship? So stop expecting to him to make it exclusive to your religion and ignoring everybody else's.
This is lazy writing. What do you mean by Gust, Whirlwind, etc? You can atleast state the Pokemon moves can't you?
Bro, ypu don't use any 'comma' or any other stuff. You just keep the paragraph going and it feels really weird to read. How is it different from MTL?
Is he stupid or something? Why is he talking to himself? Can't he talk?
Good. Add some of his teammates reactions and comments too instead of just stating that he knew what they said. It'll make it better. I had one more suggestion, but it's up to you to decide as you're the one writing the story. I just feel like the story will fell better in 3rd person perspective instead of the 1st Person.
I just have one suggestion to improve the story. I've noticed that recently, the fillers are increasing more and more while the actual game is over within a few paragraphs and Pov's. You're not showing the game anymore. Just saying what happened during the game. This doesn't help with the visualization and decrease the reading quality of an otherwise good novel.
Don't do the AOE one. That will be over the top.