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Interviewer: "Do you think you are ready for this?" The_Little_Boy: "Of course, I am!" Interviewer: "Alright speak then..." 3... 2.... 1.... "Roll!" The_Little_Boy: "So, it's finally time for the generic five star review huh? Well, let me give you a brief summary of the novel before I say anything else. 'This novel is about a young and aspiring programmer, Aiden who intends to build apps that can help improve the society. However, his dreams came tumbling down when he is transmigrated into a new world where magic existed. He slowly adapts to the new world and also gains a new dream in the process of doing so. He now wanted to become the stronger mage in the world and he embarks in a journey to fulfill his new dream.... " Comments: 1. My first comment is that this book my seem very cliche but trust me it's not. The start might seem incredibly familiar but, it would change as time progress. Be ready for lots of twist and turns. 2. This novel has a slightly slower start as compared to most other novel because I want to take my time to explain all the main things about this new world before I continue. Thus might seem very slow, but trust me, the story will gain momentum as it continues. 3. I am still thinking about whether this book should have a harem or not. I have decided to entrust this decision to my readers. Comment 'harem' for a harem and 'no-harem' for no harem. At the start of the volume where his first love interest will take place, I will count all of this to check the one which my readers want the most and execute it according to that. 4. Update speed: I will be updating 1 chapter everyday and maybe two chapters on some days. for every 100 power stones votes though, I will provide 3 extra chapters. And for every 5 golden tickets, I will provide, to extra chapters at the end of the week. So please remember to vote. 5. Support: Please remember to support this book as it is part of a competition. Remember to comment and leave a review after you have read for a while. Those are the only words that I have to say. You can ask any question about the book by commenting it here, under this review! Bye, and enjoy reading the book!" *Cut!* Director: "He did well.. He is very good!" Interviewer: "Indeed I think he is the right man for the job. He is hired now!" The_Little_Boy: "Yes, it worked." (looking into the camera) "Remember to leave a review! Bye" *Wink!*
I've only read the first few chapters, but I can say that the story is off to a good start. There are a few grammatical errors here and there, but nothing major, there is space for improvement; overall, good story; good luck, author!
This novel is great. Probably one of the best I have read which contains good grammar and less mistakes. in fact, I never saw any mistakes during my reading. Because of that, i was able to quickly get involved in the story from my own perspective.... The only problem I have with the book is the descriptions. In short, I think the writer should make the descriptions less. Instead of writing a long list of personal attributes as description, the author can try to make it more readable by incorporating it with other scenes
What were the civilians doing here. I thought they would have to evacuate people when something like this happened...
Too much description here too
Too much description of physical description here
The sentence is too long. Would be better if you divided the contents into multiple lines making it more readable
Great chapter but the sentences are inexpressive and a little too short. So are the scenes. I think you should add more emotion to your words, and also write more descriptive scenes...
If there is one thing that I like about this novel, then it's the descriptions. Even though the first chapter was quite bleak and mysterious, I still like the way that the writer explained and started to unfold the truth slowly. Truthfully, I am quite surprised about how the world building is coming up. At first, I wondered where the MC was and why he was dying but with subsequent chapters, I came to fully understand that. Not to say the novel doesn't have any mistakes though. Especially for the first chapter, the introduction was quite bleak as I explained above. Nevertheless, the book is generally interesting to read and I am definitely adding to my collections!