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HX_Gas10mthPostedhonestly, i can only say i like it. the plot in particular i really like, ussually youd expect like system or maybe "golden finger"(thats what chinese people call it) or essentially cheats when someone transmigrates to the world of anime, but usually these things upset the power balance and makes some parts of the novel not make sense. if i had to say though, maybe make aqua more "vulnerable" ? or maybe show emotions or inner thoughts so he seems more human, so far it feels that tinge of unrealism or hole in the stpry where somehow hes able to plan and do all these things without having any difficulty under the so called pretext of practice, after all we are not shown or informed his past life whether hes a genius or a dunce, a lazy person who wants to live a laidback life or a hardworking maniac, well thats it, i like youre story since its just up to 50 chapters rnow from where im reading, it seems to have a lot of potential for worldbuilding. ps: i like how u include the pov of different characters when a big incident happens.
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how weak the human mind is......
"I'm coming down to save you!" I was a man easily persuaded. - HX_Gas1yrCommented
so basically in this paralel universe, he just left everything in his past behind ?
'The better I is complete! Bring me whatever insult you have, no mental attack can damage me anymore!' Rein thought as he dived into the sky, showered by moonlight. - HX_Gas1yrCommentedCh 20 20 Princess’ Growth
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lofi : hah ?! Si Shiro kenapa beli semua ini ?!
"The heck? Why did Shiro buy all this?!" Iofi asked in Indonesian. I assume she was asking Reine. - HX_Gas1yrCommentedCh 188 Battle in 5 Seconds After Meeting
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hey author.....i remember a specific guy on twitter with this kind of story meeting for calli and kiara......are u by any chance the guy ?
THEN something broke the silence. A creak in the ground. Then another creak. The girl began to walk into the direction she heard the sounds coming from increasing her pace steadily. When she reached the source she saw nothing but corpses of knights littering the area. They were sliced though or smashed into the ground causing the cracks to form. The girl brought their swords up instantly highly on guard but seemingly someone passed her without her noticing only when she turned around did she see the person the reaper. "Who are you?" She asked but the reaper didn't reply. "What the Hell. Why can't I sense this person?" She thought. "And that thing.." she looked on the scythe in the hand of the reaper. "Oh. It's you again!" she stated to remember. She encountered this woman before but it wasn't a nice experience for her. "Seriously, how do you manage to pass through my senses every time. Completely unnoticed!" she proclaimed. "So you didn't learn your lesson from last time huh. Let me remind you what happens if you underestimate the the power and might of the strongest life form in existence... the pheon..." before she she could finish her sentence she was beheaded like last time when she encountered the reaper." She screamed in shock but calmed again. She grabbed her head and put it on her neck were it magically reconnected. "What the fuck are you doing!" She began to shout "You know how troublesome it would be if my head was to fall to the ground right!" But the reaper didn't react. "AHEM! W-WELL LIKE I SAID, before I was interrupted by you, YOU WILL NEVER LAY A FINGER ON MY BEAUTIFUL FEATHER. AS LONG AS MY LIFE STILL-" She was beheaded again but reconnected her head as fast as I was beheaded with a small flame. "JUST LET ME FINISH THIS OKAY!" The reaper wore the same expressionless face unfazed by the shouting of the pheonix. "For god's sake. This is so pointless! Why don't you just tell me what you want. What is the reason that you keep following me?" Without a warning did a chain wrap around the wast of the pheonix and dredged her into the direction of the reaper. ARE YOU SERIOUS ?! URGHH! YOU WANNA FIGHT THAT MUCH, HUH!? FINE!" With that said did the pheonix kick the reaper into the stomach and freed herself from the chains. She started to sprint and picked her swords from the ground. When she wanted to slice the reaper was already gone. In the corner of her eye did she see how a scythe speeded into the direction of her face. She tried to sidestep but was sliced in half. Her legs tried to stay up but fell to the ground like her torso. When the reaper tried to check if the pheonix was really dead did torso grab her hand and ignited into flames which obliterated everything in its path.