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SnowStorm_85015mthCommentedThe they/them and he/she ruins the whole sentence
The person makes even those two ranks above him/her fear him/her as if he/she were a ruler and make them want to obey his/her orders.- SnowStorm_85015mthReplied to Dekmalvoy1153
It’s fine as it is. This title has a totally different meaning than tbate
Chapter 2: The Beginning of the End (1) - SnowStorm_85015mthCommented
Gives me SS vibes
When the beast turned him over and trapped him between its claws, he felt that his life here would end with a claw in his stomach. These were his last moments. Just then, at the altar, a terrible aura startled both the beast and the young man. The pressure was so heavy that the monster withdrew its claw from him and stepped back. When the young man looked to his side, half unconscious, he saw a being emerge from the shadows. - SnowStorm_85015mthReplied to Nyxane
Same😂
Seeing this Lumine's lips curled upwards as a smile formed on her face. 'They aren't rash.' - SnowStorm_85018mthPosted
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-Note to Auhtor. We dont need the skill description every time. The name of the skill itself is enough.
Void Lv. Max (Locked) – this is an authority given to the User. This skill enables the User to use a dimensional portal that would suck everything into nothingness. Using this skill requires a lot of mana and the more mana the User had, the more bigger and destructive the skill is. This can only be used once a month. - SnowStorm_85011yrCommented
Not this either, IMO
{Mana: 150} - SnowStorm_85011yrCommented
Feedbacl to Author. I dont’t think it’s necessary, going into details here. We dont really need the info
(40,000 gold) (Service Charge: 10,000 gold) - SnowStorm_85011yrCommented
I think it’s supposed to be instant* ring
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Accurate description
"...meet you again someday. Hopefully, you will not be the same miserable pile of deceit and lies when I see you again." - SnowStorm_85011yrCommented
The MC really lives up to being a MASSIVE extra
"No. Eileen successfully made them do everything you listed on the paper... except for kissing." - SnowStorm_85011yrPosted
Don’t read this garbage. I have gotten to chapter 90, and it’s getting worse for each chapter. The MC is the biggest looser I have ever read. He wants to follow the ‘original’ story whatever the cost, which includes cucking himself by trying to ship his Girlfriend with the ‘MC’. The story is fine in the beginning, but turns into mess with no plot whatsover. The MC have second to none character development. There are multiple times where he gets the dillema of doing the right thing for himself and doing the plot for no FUCKING reason! And he always does the wrong action. The MC is the most passive, Beta male extra in existence. And kills inocent kids just to make the other characters follow the plot.
- SnowStorm_85011yrCommented
Thats what you get PUNK!
"WAIT! YOU BASTARD! GIVE ME MY GIRLFRIENDS BACK!" - SnowStorm_85011yrCommented
Just kill him off, he’s way worse than the MC
—After all, this was the event were Raun would originally die in. - SnowStorm_85011yrCommented
I hate the fact that he’s manipulating the characters to ’fall in love’. Why can’t he just make them be friends?!
'So that she can be with the Hero' - SnowStorm_85011yrPosted
(I am currently on chapter 10) The beginning is fine and the MC seems like your average reincarnator, but he does express himself more and his choices seem natural Grammar seems good to btw. But suddenly we get other characters POV. And there seems like it have 3 extra MC’s including the original mc, we have one reincarnator and one similar to the «Parallel Memory» MC (He basically knows the future because he read the book in another life?) Overall the plot seems very interesting and unique and the world builing is alright. I just hope the Author doesn’t focus too much on the other »MC’s» the book has a great start and I belive it could turn out well.