love the little details in expressions but i think more of it won't hurt, but you are doing great

Roosevelt seem like a character I would like, sassy diva🤭🤭

please try to emphasize on the characters features like face, hair, skin etc but the story is going great

please leave the middle names of the characters it's not important, I like the first paragraph that was creative, nice story my dear

keep working hard, the sky is your starting point 😘😘😘😍😍😍

my girl you are amazing, I enjoyed your story and I am your number one fan 😍😍😍 😘😘😘keep it up, please pay attention to your story development don't divert from the major points, more expressions from the characters will be nice, great work anyways