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frankly i'm getting disappointed in the author for following the same route. Here in this Page MC calls Association president 'sir'. It's like MC is on drugs. In whole fanfic he dreams to be strongest and most powerful in the multiverse. and in next second he calls someone 'Trash' sir. he is contradicting at least 60 pages of his boring self-explanation of using the system to 'Stand above all' in Multiverse. Why everyone treats Association President GO GUNHEE as he is some sort of messiah.. he is trash like all who are weak to strong and turn blind eye when strong kill innocent weak . Just like when Hwang Dongsoo came korea to torture and kill Sung jin-woo then association president's lackey directly took him to red gate where sung jin-woo was even when Hwang Dongsoo stated to kill and torture a E-rank.
Void is cool but it is not possible to make it origin instead how about MC's origin being WORLD fragment which gains consciousness because of MC's transmigration and its only goal is to reach the top of hierarchy like outer gods. It will also explain MC's craziness for gaining power his good and bad deeds as he aggregation of all good all sins too . just a suggestion
Author just a suggestion. This is 'Fan-fic' which means we readers have already read the original Light novel so you should not write the same explanation as the original novel. You should complete similar thing in one para and focus on the new twist which 'you include' in your fan-fic which is different from the original. Lastly, don't make the protagonist act as dumb as he is 'TRANSMIGRATOR' which means he knows what is going to happen as he himself has read solo-leveling light novel and knows the general route in which the world will proceed.
The mall chapters are a bit too cheesy. It's like sun-jin-woo is king of simps. There is contrast to his strong willed nature which should be good but cheesiness goes way too extreme. This makes this and previous chapter bit lacking in substance. I think you should write a bit less detailed 'date' chapters.
Just trash.. author is trying milk everything to avoid resurrection. adding story after story of past which are just outright trash just as its spineless protoganist who acts like crybaby
MC is just trash, show off, and tells every secret if a girl ask(simp) in later chapters. 1.he is naive as he give other get his information(training method to get strong) without getting their information(its like exchanging nothing with something). 3.Does not control the information in order to gain upper hand. 4. Emotional fool like instead of killing or continuing his perfect plan for phyne he lets her go and destroying just tower. causing him to appear to god court for juggement which results in him to opt Familia battle. Putting life of his familia member and whole familia future in question mark His naivety and foolishness just increases at whole another level as story goes on. According to my view, secret shouldn't be told or shown to anyone. secondly I don't understand why people write protagonist as naive, fool, dumb, show-off