This is a good idea for a book and I love the dialogue between the characters. An upgrade would be to be more descriptive. I would to be able to visualize the different Elders and their powers. How does the different factions look and specify more of the the different roles of the Elders. I am genuinely looking forward to reading this and watch you improve on your writing.

This is good!👏🏾👏🏾The dialogue flowed but it would be better if you could make it more descriptive.