See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

I, personally would give my book a 4.8 star rating because I've to support myself as well. I know how much I've dedicated to shaping the characters, ensuring my book is void of grammatical errors and I know for sure that this book would be a blast. spoiler alert; there's a secret, one neither of you see coming. What you expect to happen, might not be what would happen. A very dark secret accompanied with a favor. what would someone who has it all, really want from someone who also has it all?

good question. why didn't she just sell the ring for the money? Jazmyn got something up her sleeves she doesn't wanna tell us

I'm not really a fan of these kind of books but I must mention the things I love about this book. The writing quality is so darn good. The book is interesting, it has the hook to keep you in. If I were to rate this book in one word, I'd say, ‘awesome’. Keep up the good work, author😌😊

okay**

lol okuay

so it's really interesting? thanks though. Thought of deleting the book to quit writing, I needed this motivation. I really do appreciate but I can't continue the book yet. I'm still in a writing dilemma

repitition*

At this juncture, explanation is a lot. You can summarize all your explanations in a sentence, get to the bottom line of your story or readers would drop your book. Get to the dialogue, get to what's currently happening. Your book is written in past tense and 3rd person pov, i.e the (he, she, them, we, they, their), now continue in past tense, maintain your tense and the POV. if you're mixing povs, make sure you don't make it too much and mix only one POV with this one, like first POV would do. i.e (I, myself) but I suggest you remain in 3rd POV, mixing povs isn't easy but get to the bottom line of your story. if you keep giving a lot of explanations with zero dialogue and it's not getting to the point of the book, readers would eventually drop your book

long been in the business. (then you can bring in the part of her losing to Winter, but make it brief so you can get to the bottom line of your book, or readers won't pick it up)

that she had long been in the business. The others that come after it isn't relevant.

due to his unique physique,* observe punctuations. I don't read fantasy novels, but I have to, for you😊😊

so far.* But*

At work,* and there's reputation. "At work, everyone has been trying to work so hard"❌ (like tautology) Try: Everyone has been trying to work so hard

had done,*

twas❌❌❌ It was

It* rang again. After all,* he better listen to her,*

To be frankly honest with you, I'm not a fantasy reader, you made just a very little grammar mistake. Your story is quite interesting to tell and would have a lot of readers and fans and would even get a contract if you can fix these issues; 1) No cliffhangers. Nothing intrigues me to read on...I read the first chap and can't get past it 2) Excessive irrelevant sentences...mind you, this book is nice, but you put a lot of time explaining what you could explain in a single paragraph and get to the bottom line of the story. 3) In as much as your grammar is good, I've to tell you this. Your book is written in past tense, at least, from the first chapter I see and it should remain in past tense through out.. Nice work you have there author, little to zero mistakes! I understand, I'm not better myself, yeah? But, I'm trying to improve. If you check my novel https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/24855973605013505?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4319793355, you'd see I have some reviews that hurt, I had to delete my chaps and re write my book and take corrections, if I didn't do that, I wouldn't only not get a contract, but I will also not have readers. fighting author! Keep up the good work. We can do it! Achieve!!!

whereby it came* to a stop, not come that sentence was written in past tense and should continue thus

the book looks interesting. I haven't had time to read it but I must commend you for giving it a unique start. I'll surely add it to my library for later.