Kyroru

*use a combination of earth a water jutsu. First use earth jutsu to make a turret and water jutsu to fire out of the turret. Maybe call it something like ‘mobile fortress’

This is the same chapter as last

Agreed tho you can expand the shadow jutsu making new moves if you still have him become a Nara.

I wouldn’t mind a continuation but a rewrite would be good as long as you continue lol 😂

I think you messed up the order of the chapter. Reading it it look like chapter 8 and 7 should be fliped.

I’m not accepting money for chapters cause I don’t want this to be an obligation. I’ll let you know I have begun writing more chapter for my MCU one. I won’t start posting till I have a few chapter backlogged so it may be a bit still when new chapters get out.

Ya I’ve been planing to continue my mcu one sometime soon but I’ve been haveing brain fart on continueing it. I’ve been going back and forth on changing part of the fic keeping the mc a saiyan or not with the wish he made and change part of the dbz part. And I also got real life with my job that kinda takes up some time so I’ll try to find the time to get to it.

Then why is that fic 170 chapters in and yours is only 90? The chapters don’t match up but i compared multiple of your chapters against that one and it’s the same chapters with the wording changes in some areas.

So much for believing in his son