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not undermined, but underestimated or something like that

se "who seemed to be shook up and scared."

use "later"

take out the "a"

and put a comma after high. High is ok, but because of "long-range" I think of archery and thus height. perhaps something like "large" or "excessive"?

take out the "a"

See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

it was just in the ocean. it couldn't be desiccated. how about decimated?

I like the story, but won't finish it or recommend it due to the porn scenes described in detail. Very disappointed. Suggestions about what is happening would be better than graphic detail straight from a porn movie.