Also near the beginning of the series (like pre-100 chapters) it was mentioned by Granpa Zel that whenever Will takes an item of considerable power from a world he is taking away potential from that world, not paying that debt would eventually lead to consequences. His granting of Aura to Issei, giving it a chance to spread further in this world is paying back that stolen potential.

I believe Will’s appearance made it so the engagement was never pushed forward in time like in canon as there were no serious events occurring then but here, with a new powerhouse of devil ancestry appearing, Khaos Brigade attacking Kyoto earlier (due to Will’s interference), the the attack of the Fae, then the kidnapping of Velena and Milicas happing, all this happening before Kokabiel attack and the Peace conference meant Rias’s engagement was just never pushed forward

Thanks for the Chapter!

Hey Author, I love the story but I wanted to give a personal criticism (therefore feel free to ignore it if it isn’t helpful). I feel like in general Harry is lacking on how creatively he uses his Archmage powers, for example I don’t mind the concept of the martial art technique but it feels like Harry should have other options regarding body enhancement if he just put some thought into it. Or, even just being able to cheat through the martial art technique, he seems to be following step by step like a ‘normal’ person which just seems inefficient with his power.

I believe there are 2 reasons for the comments. Firstly lack of visible progress. Pre-timeskip Adam would likely be able to beat Jose, not as cleanly as he did after but the only things you mentioned that people have any context towards in the timeskip were Adam getting injured in training a technique or by a god, it is difficult to really feel like he has improved when the only real mention of his true strength, his Bankai is yet another technique that will kill him for more power without outside interference, that sounds exactly the same as what happened in his fight with Artemis. This leads to the second problem, if it feels like he barely gained anything from the timeskip it ends up feeling like he just left to preserve the plot. And now after the timeskip where he should finally be strong enough to handle some of the consequences of changing the plot, he doesn’t. Adam is a very well written character, with good character flaws and strengths but if he has close to zero impact on the world does he really matter? Is Erza even that much stronger than canon after training with him, Cana has a full family structure in this, never had to deal with losing her mother, has a dad and brother in the picture and the only thing that changes is her clothes. Ur, Grey’s teacher, an extremely powerful mage alive and is in the guild but ends up doing a whole load of nothing. Lilia an OC to be a friend of Adam and introduced to be his companion similar to the Thunder God tribe has quite literally no feats to her name. To the reader it is frustratingly annoying to read a 100 chapters which amount to only a couple of changes and cameos from a couple of future enemies showing how far he needs to go and then after a massive timeskip having Adam be put in a bad situation by an opponent weaker than he faced pre-timeskip, In any case I do really like the story but it has been slightly frustrating after the timeskip at least imo.

I always feel that would be the case even if the name was correct. Like the idea you can be forced into a contract with zero consent is weird in itself. It could be so easily abused, imagine every year there wasn’t an official tournament you put people’s names in it and they wouldn’t even be aware of it and lose their magic.

Yes, he could retaliate, but for what purpose? They quite literally have nothing of value that would be worth such an effort, it would be pointless. Plus now when Harry and Hermione have to face the realities of war in a couple years they will still probably turn to him which would definitely not happen if he takes revenge. And for the devils, part of it is because they are stronger, but it is mostly they have something he wants and are an open door to money, magical power and lifespan, it would be stupid of him to put his pride and ego first and risk losing that because the devils are being rude

If Hozion gives advice that he would give/has given himself, I believe that is classified as nice in his world.

While this might be slightly strong currently, a form of blink (minor instant teleportation) could be cool. It could be extremely limited like only a couple of meters or even that he can only blink behind someone.

That was in Campione so no one in DXD had seen it before Venelana

If anything, rather than being a disadvantage, it will confuse them completely when he brings out something other than Surtur’s sword from the tree because of the lack of conceptual based magic in DXD

It is in these moments that Will gets the best ‘revenge’. Being a better person, a better father than the people who shunned him

Agreed, I like him a lot

They are humanoid but even animals put more thought into combat than zombies. I will admit that being able to keep calm while being swarmed is a very valuable skill. The only reason I suggested that was since you are doing a fic about a gradual path to power, a very important aspect (at least imo) for the reader is to be able to feel the character progress in strength. You can focus on the more mental aspects of strength in HOTD but it could easily feel dragged on if it goes on too long without progress or if you move on quickly to the next world the HOTD arc could feel irrelevant since dealing with something as low level as goblins in danmachi could prove to give better combat experience than the entire HOTD arc. This is just my thoughts on the matter, if you find it useless please feel free to ignore it

I’d suggest, if you were not doing it already, to give a way for MC (potentially Saeko as well) to get stronger while in HOTD. It is the only world from your list so far that is missing a ‘power system’ as it is currently.

You are thinking of the wrong Fantastic Beasts there. While it could be really cool, it would take a very skilled writer to pull off Pokemon in that setting

Agreed, honestly I think this is the main reason I like Horizon as a character so much. He is a flawed character in the sense he is egotistical to the extreme however he has some very valid lines of thought.

Google translate mistranslated that. I will try to make it easier to translate. Izuku does not want to train because it will make it obvious he is weak, he would prefer live in a dream rather that the real world

I actually don’t think he had determination to be a hero, I think Izuku was extremely depressed and deluded himself into believing that he could be a Hero to keep himself from having to face the reality of his situation, training would be a reminder of how weak he was and force him to face reality, hence he didn’t do it. Izuku was chosen because of his Heroic heart, not because of his dedication to working hard towards becoming a hero.

It would be cool to see an MC using the resources of a Sacred 28 family properly