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im 10 chapters in and the level of cringe hurts me. let's list out the things that give me the urge to wretch while reading. MC has white hair(including the whole family apparently) MC is a cuckold MC has a Katana named Katara(double whammy) The opening scene has 'im a very badass' scene. Shouts the name of there attacks outloud(actually doesn't bother me to much but I know it bothers a lot of other people) What the author could do make it worse. Name your MC or any character some shitty name like zero, void, hero.(a parent doesn't look at their child and think, "yes you look like a zero to me.") Make references to external media.(Naruto and Marvel seem to be the biggest offenders) Like I've watched maybe 30 episodes of the first Naruto series and I know shit. so please don't call magic eye powers what ever the hell Naruto calls them. I could continue but I'm losing steam from my Lil rant and would rather continue reading for now. Overall don't try and show us how badass your character is. Just let the story progress normally, their badass-ness will show over time. Actions over words or some shit like that.
human world?
my dude I read that book like 8 months ago, I don't even know what your talking about?
wow that came far out of left field.
I recall in a previous chapter he managed to completely cut through a tree. he's even stronger now. so why cant he cut it?
Honestly I think he should of rebelled a bit and see if he could use loop holes. such as using Alexander or using a entire new name to go against this being X. Being X only said he will feel pain when he uses his old name, he never said anything about feeling pain when not using Shang as a name.
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Hunt a deer or a few rabbits? Nah lets just rob people and hope they are carrying food.