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well done man

as an author i can confidently say this is a good start for a fanfiction.Keep at it

And please do your best with grammar.all of these other new fanfictions are so bad that it makes me whant to throw up.

I agree, that's a good choice.So author do your best and remember we're the reader's, but you're author san, so the last decision is yours.

good focuse this time and you'll write an amazing story .also go look for inspiration from other fics that can maybe help

this seems like chat GPT

can i just say these chapters are just turning out to be monologues and not actual chapters.its moust like the author has forgotten that ulf is a reincarnated persone and that he knows the future.Author keeps wanting to make ulf look like a nornal human with his enotions not realizing that they seem forced.

this is inconsistent one minute you say he's swordsman ship is unparalleled thrn you say it has no finess.your righting is good and grammar is on poiny but you have some plot holes.

first question is this going to be a harem fic, i ask this because i despise harem. Bot only is it unrealistic but after the harem thing begins the stlry only revolvs around that. second question, this one is mpre of a request, every maincharacter these days is a forced antihero could you and i put emphasis on the COULD. Pleas make a decent mc thats smart also not a beta if someone messes with him he'll destroy them. and last but surtanly not least, can you make the mc not hate rhaenyra but not like her in the sense that lets be honest here rhaenyra is not fit to become queen the knly reason she wants the throne is because it was the only thing she could hold on to after her father basicaly started a new fammily. thanks for listening or reading rant and also good luck.

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bruh realy

nah bro you f up i told you shouldn't have done that

i swear im mind blown, this is insane

The mc will look like this when he's older

we never get ashara dayne

Honestly this fanfiction could go somewhere but first you need to make it easier to read by making paragraphs. second if you fix the small mistakes and you add more grammar you got yourself a good read. 👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾👍🏾 anyway when's the next chapter coming out

dude this is absolutely insane this could become one of the best game of thrones fanfictions when are we going to see a new chapter.