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Also I got a request, pls don’t make mc act like a goody two shoe or act cringe just for a plan pls

Is it ok if you can put mc’s character information chapter in the auxilary volume pls

Why would mc want to make his father angry? Hope mc doesn’t do a cringe act of sorts

Hope mc does have a few weaknesses like pride and ego. Would be fun to see him rage and stuff

Probably Cecil keeps an eye on him

You read Marvel Comics? If so who’s your favourite character? Mine is Doctor Doom

Can there be smut?

Story is ok, but your going too fast. Slow down a bit, you ever read a story called God of the Omniverse? Or Conquering the Omniverse? Don’t have mc yell all the time if possible

So far story is good but make chaps more longer and detailed m. Describe the environment a bit more, dialogue and realism and focus on grammar