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Hmm, I will introduce non-sentient animals with powers soon. There is one more reveal left before they leave the place and then I will show how the world has changed, introducing different kinds of beasts. I will then add taming and see how it vibes with the rest of the story cos I wanna emphasize the danger with the 'aliens.' But, at some point I will show the stranger's side of the story which will entirely take place in the other world. That part will have lots of focus on taming and animals in general. Thanks for the suggestion!
So, adding to the hints in the very first chapter, the system and the stuff surrounding it is inspired by the visuals of H.R Geiger. I haven't explored them enough for now, but I will start dropping more details about it. I also want to have some Lovecraftian themes but they wouldn't be too integral to the story. Thanks for reading !
Hmm, didn't think about it from that angle. But there's a reason why she isn't concerned about her father, it will be explained in either the next chapter or the one after that. Actually, there's already a hint for it in chapter 3.
So, at first, I had written these two chapters as a single one. But it was too long so I decided to split it. Also, I can only write in my free time, and the release schedule only considers the number of chapters released. So I thought this would help. Let me know if you felt it was too short and would like me to combine similar chapters in the future.
So I rewrote this chapter because I wanted to give it a horror vibe. I am going to be introducing more people with powers, so I wanted to establish how they seem to normal people. Let me know how it went, I most probably won't need to do it again.
Ugh, come on. It was going well. Then it turned into have to hide my power cliché.
Let me guess, he killed them all cos they were men.
Lol, he is gonna be one of those dumb mcs isn't he? No problem with killing men but somehow women are no no. It was going so well too. If this happens again, it's time to drop this.
Lol, Monarch my ass. Mc gets pushed around by his sister all the time. He makes dumb decisions cos he can't go against his idiot sister. Also, it feels like his sister barely cares about him at all. After a difficult fight she goes to heal some random person they met instead of her brother. And it just continues with almost every character he meets. He never makes his own decision. It's like he isn't control of anything at all. It's like a Japanese beta mc.
Wow, he's sO sMaRt. Seriously though, why did it take him this long to realise anything at all?
Lol, God of tricksters my a**. That's some astonishingly low bar for a "trickster". So elite level assassins who are way above MC's level get tricked by MC playing dead. Mc has no consistent personality. He seems way too stupid to be considered intelligent and everyone else has an iq of a vegetable. So he is shown to be a genius for coming up with the most basic tactics and dedcutions. Interesting premise but extremely poor execution.
Writing is actually good with decent characters and world building. What let's it down is the mc. He is whiny, pathetic, spineless loser with a smooth brain. The problem is he pretty much stays that way. Never develops. He is powerless while the FL is the opposite. This isn't bad at all but he can't do the one thing he is capable of. He can't even give emotional support to the FL. It's not cos he is cold or emotion-less. It's the opposite, he is too emotionally weak. It feels like he's gonna cry in almost every scene. He is always overthinking and is indecisive. Instead of him providing emotional support, he needs it the most. A completely useless and worthless character.