Tony_Castaneda_0831

You making him to much into a bully

He has blurred the lines of protecting himself and those he cares of. His need for more power and control is too much. His upbringing was good, but it feels like you want to make him into a bad guy. The initial story was good. after 80 chapters, he went too far. I would be dropping this since I actually like aemond and don't want to see his life crumble.

keeping writing. this novel has its issues. But I have read the worst novels out there. this one is good for a new writer. don't worry about the haters and take their every comment you get to be a better writer. I like this novel

every encounter in his journey feels forced. meeting a poacher and ends with a new pokemon. so many bug trainers challenge him until he fights back. ash forcing him into battling. when people ask if he is a trainer, all he needs to say is NO. all leads him to challenge the gyms when Misty asks him to give a letter to her sister, he will probably lead him to a gym battle. all he needs to do is go to vermilion city and then cinnabar island to finish his task. author needs a better reason for him to travel.

my problem with his current team is that he has no gym pokemon. he has pokemon he uses to battle, but not everyone is as strong as red. His first pokemon should be a freebie to the challenger to see the level the trainer is at. He needs pokemon of each level for his gym matches. From rookies trainers to ace trainers, pokemon are needed to be a good trainer.

This shows both the light and darkness of pokemon. The bond and journey with your pokemon. overall great content and story. Hopefully, the author can continue the story and not stop writing since I'm hooked on the potential of this pokemon fanfic.

latias or latios

feels unnecessary

Good novel and has huge potential. Will the mc take a long time before he learns more of the world he is in and the common sense most cultivators have in the world. Will he know which realm he is in and how to teach others how to cultivate. As someone who is powerful, I would like to know the power structure a cultivator in each realm can do.

i would love that this can be a whole mini arc with arvina looking for him or nux saving her after being caught