Kaz_Sensei

...Don't look at this wanting an explanation. I'm the author! Do you expect me to give myself anything lower!? But by all means, critique as you wish! I hope you enjoy King of Rankers!!

So, I have only read a single chapter but I can say your story definitely has promise! I do have some points however that I would like to dish out. Please do not take this an attack, I merely want to help you. Firstly, your beginning is interesting, however I feel like your scenes lack impact. I don't mean their concept lack impact, but the delivery more so. You more or less say rather than show. I think your scenes could do better with more development and building of the surroundings. Describing the things like the blood, potentially an insight to the protagonists feelings before its revealed he has been shot, something like that would help. Finally I'd like to comment on your paragraph spacing when it comes to like the system comments. If you spaced them more out I think it'd look better and feel more like a menu or announcement screen that had popped up, unless you were going for something totally different. Anyways keep up the good work and keep writing!!

Hi! Author Kaz-Sensei here! This work is written by me and was originally released on Tapas. If you'd like, you can read it on there or you can continue reading here. I will be updating both series at the same time. Have fun with it and enjoy!!!

May as well support my own work. If I can't appreciate it, no one will. Feel free to ask me any questions if your unsure or having doubts about this series, I will try my hardest to make things clear. Thank you for taking the time out of your day for clicking this!!

Shameless review to hopefully kick things off. Though, I guess you can't blame an author for supporting his own work. ;-) Please consider reviewing this series as well, and make sure to tell me about any criticisms you may hold for this story.