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Igor_Di_Novaes

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2021-10-31 JoinedGlobal
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  • Igor_Di_Novaes
    Igor_Di_Novaes5 months ago
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    Very good, continue!

  • Igor_Di_Novaes
    Igor_Di_Novaes7 months ago
    Commented

    As for your story, I'm really enjoying it, I just don't like the hassle of launching God of War. It was the first thing he started doing, and something always comes up beforehand to delay the launch further, I think you should launch it soon so he can move on to other things, like Call of Duty Warzone... or Pokemon in VR would be cool . Regarding boku no hero. I thought it had the potential to be a better version of Justice League, if it were that universe, exploring more adult life and professional heroes, maybe even international politics, if All Might was the protagonist and the plot used more of the top 10 best , it could be a Japanese justice league. with a universe with much more potential, because I wouldn't have to keep repeating villains.

  • Igor_Di_Novaes
    Igor_Di_Novaesa year ago
    Posted

    this is very bad. It's a complete mess. nothing makes sense. In one chapter he does one thing and in the next chapter he immediately contradicts himself. It seems that with each chapter the author wants to follow a different path for the story. Probably the worst story I've ever read. the premise is interesting, but it's not readable, you should really rewrite this. Choose where you want to take this story and follow that path.

  • Igor_Di_Novaes
    Igor_Di_Novaesa year ago
    Commented

    I'm really enjoying this story, I hope you don't put it down, even if you have to slow down your writing pace. I eagerly hope that you don't just focus on video games that exist. for example, in the future he could launch a mental immersion game like Yegdrasil from Overlord, or this new anime Shangrila Frontier. Anyway, the story is getting better, keep it up.

  • Igor_Di_Novaes
    Igor_Di_Novaesa year ago
    Posted

    Estou com preguiça de escrever em inglês, mas o importante ê a mensagem, adoro sua história, concentre-se nas coisas boas, deixe de lado os odiadores, tem muita gente gostando, concentre-se neles, são essas pessoas que merecem sua atenção. Quanto a história, sugiro dar mais sequência no mundo terraria antes dele viajar pra outro mundo, Terraria parece ser o mundo "base" então de mais continuidade ali, espero que continue sua história até o fim ou pelo menos muito longe ainda. Isso é tudo, boa sorte e bom trabalho.