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If I ever was to write a Taylor fanfic. I would have her defeat the Butcher and ergo take his powers. Her shard the multi tasking Queen Administrator would be perfect in dealing with the downsides. Sadly most fanfics about Worm/Parahumans are softcore pg rated. And seem like a gender studies homework assignment. So it never interested me that much. This seems like a promising start though.
I already didn't like how you censored the original and took all the sharp edges off. So my expectations weren't that high. Now we are at the point of new material. And... it's short for starters. Also it doesn't seem as good as the original. I really hope you manage to pull of a miracle and pull it together. It had always much potential.
I agree his marriage, is his only ace in the hole. The only way he can give himself agency in that world. And he is giving that up for? Riding away cowardly on a dragon? The very same weapon only Targariens feel like they have right to own. Putting him on their deathlist?
I have too many questions. A victim of bulllying was already farfetched. And he is acting like a child.... I have no idea what his goals are. Swordwielding yes good but why blacksmitting? That doesn't fit for a high born. And what are your plans for his wife? Is he gonna be a man and put a child in her. Or remain a cuck and sulk in the shadows.