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based on the story, I'm pretty sure it's bakugo

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Okay, so recently I made a review abt this novel being AI. Honestly, my point still stands, the first chapters suffered from the same issues as AI slop (redundancy, forced profoundness) But recently, I’m starting to see improvements, I’m glad author. Keep up this tactical way of fighting btw, he feels a lot like Batman compared to the other fanfic (if u know u know) and I like it.

hmmm, i hope midnight becomes a love interest even though it's unconventional. Not enough fanfics have midnight as SOLE love interest

Very good so far. The main character does not feel stupid and I love the general course to hero course trope. most importantly, no ai

i love the premise author, that's why im a fan of the other fanfic. But, writing quality and plot direction is just as important. I hope you keep this in mind when writing forward. I might continue reading this or i also might not. that's all thank you

look man, i used to create ai novels too, so i can recognize one at a glance. I'm not judging, after all, that would be very hypocritical of me. And I'm not saying my novels are better than urs cuz ik that my novels also suffer from the same issues. I'm not saying that using Ai is bad if it helps u write better, but the redundancy, constant internal monologue, and profound paragraphs every 4 paragraphs decreases the quality of the novel. ALSO, ok, let's assume u don't use ai. Even then, it still suffers from the same issues i mentioned above. And outside of writing quality, the plot is also too rushed. u and I both know the fanfic that is the inspiration for this fic. And abt that fic, I sometimes think it's Ai cuz it lowk suffers from some of the issues above but I'm kinda unsure since it's less blatant. anyways,u skipped over things way too fast in his childhood. You never showed his trial and process of.equipment and even the approval of support items in the exam. You're telling, not showing.

okay, one thing i noticed abt all Ai novels is that there are paragraphs that are profound for no reason. i also noticed that ai novels usually give too much description and constantly repeats itself to be redundant. here are some passages that I think are Ai ++ human written polished by AI Outside my window, the distant, cheerful jingle of an ice cream truck morphed mid- tune into the blaring, urgent siren of a hero patrol vehicle, racing towards some unseen crisis. The sound Doppler-shifted rising and then fading away, a reminder of the world I was in-a world of bright costumes and dark alleys, of soaring dreams and crushing realities The girl's voice was pleasant, layered with a bright, enthusiastic lilt. That lilt, combined with the memories he had meticulously documented from the original work, somehow allowed him to identify this girl. He managed to remember her character from the anime

I don't really care about the use of AI because I understand that not everyone has the necessary skills to back up their amazing ideas...but it's too blatant here 😭 it should be edited more. Like every ai paragraph, it constantly repeats itself "He stops. Not slow, not fast, completely stillness, the reality of the situation setting in" (not actually a part of the fic but an example of what to expect.) Because it keeps on repeating, there's barely any substance in the chapters and mc always goes on a long long monologue. The premise has potential but is ruined by the writing

OMG NEW CHAP LOVE U AUTHOR SAN