Dakota_Morrison

It's more like he's tired of seeing so much stupidity from someone whose already over 50 years old and experienced the cruelty of the world. And worse this stupidity is dragging others down a dangerous path that costs lives. The only benefit that the original timeline had for the group was the experience and wisdom mixed with growth in power through battle. But experience and wisdom can be gained without the pit falls of stupidity. And growth in strength is still gonna happen considering how many demons exist and desire the jewel shards. Plus naraku and his plots. It's more like breaking free from the original plot by staring a stupid person in the eyes and saying "your being stupid, get your head out your ass." And then knocking them over the head with a heavy object out of frustration.

As of the first chapter I've already formed an opinion. I'm gonna continue to read in hopes that it surprises me. But I can already tell a couple things just from the first encounter, and I'll state them here for new readers. Spoiler warning. 1: the mc is focused on looking cool with flashy moves instead of being practical, and the author is focused on using flashy descriptions instead of actually painting the realistic picture of what's going on. 2: both the author and the mc have zero idea how fighting actually works besides "hit hard and fast". 3: the author is in a rush which causes them to skip over details like weapons getting stuck in bones and muscle, or how difficult it is to stab with a blunt object. 4: finally the author has no idea how emotions or psychology works considering he made a statement of "my modern soul suppressed it" when talking about the emotional reaction to the parents dying.

No, just no. That's so overused it's not even funny. And to make it worse is the reasoning given being stupid when you consider how limiting joining those two actually is. Anything they consider dangerous or not to their liking? Congratulations the whole group is against you and will hinder you with their reasons being "morality" or "doing whatever is best for you". Even though you already know that to do this might be wrong moral wise, but it'll save more lives and puts the blame on you instead of them. Self sacrifice and such. To add a cherry on top, they constantly have situations where they themselves hold each other back with their own stupidity and arguments over what actions to take. The MC is a child, they will never listen to him because he's more likely to be the youngest there, or close to it. And he has power, but isn't a super genius so he doesn't even have that to back him up. Plus both those groups are connected to a government that is infiltrated by hydra or mutant hating extremists.

Because it's not stated in the chapter that he is getting kashimo's powers when he made the vow. It's just Stated that he got faster and a stronger electric discharge. That's not exactly useful in marvel when you consider the properties of their technologies and powers. Nor is it that impressive in comparison to the versatility of an independent body with the same powers even if weaker. Only after reading the comments is it Stated that he is getting kashimo's powers in exchange. To be fair though I didn't read the author note, so maybe it was stated in there. If so, then I'm also part of the "stupid people in the comments". to make it worse is I had to look up who kashimo was, and his abilities, before I even understood how strong those abilities actually were. Many people aren't that far into the jjk series, or don't even read/watch the series to begin with. Kinda breeds naivity and ignorance when it comes to stuff like this.

He is acting stupid. Does he not realize that people are vindictive and greedy? If he makes enemies out of everyone because of petty pride then he's gonna be blocked from trading. Or worse if combat between people becomes a thing, then he's gonna be hunted down by those he wronged. And all because he felt butt hurt that he wasn't their first pick to trade with. Does he not realize that people may not always have common survival knowledge, and as such doesn't know the value of basic items? Being upfront with them and saying "I have limited supply, but I'm working on an alternative, please survive for a bit longer" would have made allies with a bunch of people and would have benefited him because they would throw everything to get a piece of what he has. And showing sincerety by giving wood, leaves, and twigs to help them start a fire could have gotten some thanks and a good impression from many. Obviously he would have to be careful of who he trusts, and as such not tell everything, but he could make beneficial trading relationships with people struggling in zones that have resources not available to him. Hell he already has a golden finger that puts him way ahead of others, why does he need to be so petty and small minded?

Mirko. She is the most naturally physically strong. His arms are already strong enough, but his options of attack are limited to the sukuna template. Tempering that template with Mirko's fighting style using legs could make him even stronger. Plus she's literally the only one who would actually push him to continuously get stronger without other motives. And all the other canon heroes tend to lean towards styles that just don't suit him. Either they would want to pacify his personality, or they would want him to be more flashy, or they would want him to be less lethal and decisive, or worst of all, they would much more focus on using his situation as a way to grab more fame and attention. Ultimately she's the only one who could teach him to be lethal without being full kill mode. And also the only one who could teach him everything he needs without hesitation about the destruction or possible backlash from the public. And considering she is a battle junkie, she would be the best one to give him experience in fights.

Primordial red is named guy crimson. He was named as such by rudra. Get your facts straight please.

"watching the sound of him leaving" doesn't make sense. "Watching his leaving back" or "listening to the sound of him leaving" would actually make sense and paint a picture of him either staring or not looking at all. Either way it would be more immersive then the original which doesn't make sense.

You need to slow the pace down and add some introspective thought. As it is it's kinda zooming past and making the interactions seem empty. Plus nothing seems to properly click together. Emotions and proper reactions to events seems to be lacking as well. The only thing that seems solid on this is lore and grammar. Can't say anything about consistency yet because it's the first chapter.

Ok so looking up "the assassin" in the next chapter has shown me that this is either based on d&d or a game called "hunt:showdown". Maybe a mixture of both.