of heckin course he would weasel his way into adjuticating the tournament.

in that case shouldn't he be worried that they will perform the impure world reincarnation themselves? did he even get rid of all of inoichi's DNA?

I hope he doesn't. he's been a little too shameless recently and doesn't understand the immensity of mt. tai

Great fight. Has mikhail not figured out how to get his gyarados' to fly yet?

I was really hoping Mothra would pull out her size manipulation to perform a super-sized seismic toss. Grab the mon, spin in mid air while supersizing for extra leverage, and just bury that sucker 20 feet into the ground. Conservation of momentum would make that move soooooo powerful

bro... don't leave me hanging

golden finger is super special advantage that lasts throughout fic but author just wails on the mc at the start with super oppressive circumstances, basically turning the world against them to avoid a boring born as a God read. this start can be considered wealthy person gets amnesia/ stranded in a strange land with a portion of their resources. not a golden finger, just a blessed start.

you need to work on your dialogue and plot in general. this just reads: generic edgelord protagonist has no morals or personal boundaries and oh yeah every character is flatter than a cutting board personality wise because author can't be bothered to actually write THEM instead of just what they do. Mc befriends Hermione by manipulating her emotions ffs. what do we even know about the mc or his mother? what real interactions has he had? all you've done is write what happens, not how your character actually reacts or interacts with the world. no substance.

I hate this trope, especially in fics with the writing quality of your average cultivation novel.

parchment is made from animal skins and while not immune to water damage, far more durable than paper.

its not mathematically possible seeing as they were trading off nights and shelter got the first night

wasn't that sucker like 4 meters tall???

insane like someone turning against the tomb when they are perhaps the weakest lv 90 npc possible?

Needs work on the inner dialogue. Thought process of the mc is very robotic, excessively analytical, and frankly disjointed from the actual important things people tend to notice or think about. I can tell this won't be my cup of tea, hope the rest of you enjoy.

this is pretty poor inner dialogue. if she's really that affected, she'd be interrupting her own thought process to go over later, because that's human nature, not facing any flaws we don't have a clear and pressing need to fix. a more natural inner dialogue might have gone something like 'w-what?!' girl turns around and sees the improbable: kid fighting the zero pointer. 'he saved her...and i-' girl stops herself before coming to the natural conclusion that the boy did the right thing and by comparison she's a coward. girl turns away and clenches her fists before throwing herself into the thick of battle, negative revalation aside there's still a job to do and some smash therapy to be had.

diamonds are like boners

ew, just split up your paragraphs, figure out what pov you want, learn how to smoothly transition from one character to the next and flesh out your dialogue to something more organic.

Dayum! I hope he tells Arcturus and just finds another source for this information.

completely missing whatever you're trying to say hear as a response to me establishing that if genjutsu could unlock the sharingan, then at the right 3 tomoe stage it might be feasible to unlock the mangekyo.

pretty sure the ichibi seal was on gaara's forehead. the kyuubi on naruto's stomach, but regardless, one seal we know suppresses bijuu Chakra is the evil suppressing seal and that has been placed on naruto's forehead to stop the kyuubi from tacking over and getting out several times. therefore seals designed to interfere with jinchuriki probably don't need to be placed over the same spot the tailed beast was sealed.