MatildasBT
Writing
of reading
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Read books
verb tenses
stock, not store?
whats oom?
verb tense
hit it, its an animal
4 in number
How did he now( the change of POV from the earlier chap)
the POV
the POV
Great name and book cover! It really made me curious about this book. The story was good, but there are many mistakes( verb tenses, expressions, missing words), and the paragraphs are way too large, including long sentences. All of this makes the story hard to read. Well, the narrator's voice also changes frequently, without even changing the POV. That made me confused about who exactly is speaking at the moment. And the villain's only role is to attack the heroine. And the heroine, I get that she doesn't really care about their hate and all, but that only makes the villains harass her even more. Which creates a never-ending cycle. And the only emotion that properly appears( a bit too much btw) is fear. Isn't this a romance novel? Why is the heroine so... strong? Well, I don't say that is bad, but please decide on what type of heroine the book has, and after that, the story will be better. And avoid such repetition of fear and hate. If you mention it a few times is enough. And finally, where is the action taking place? and when? Maybe it is mentioned at some point, or I skipped it, I am not sure.
it went... where?
no screams, no trashing around, no calling the police.... too bland
wtf..
um...
doesn't make a lot of sense
was having dark hair?? Not exactly handsome? I don't really understand...
another long journey... cut it a bit