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Virdan_snek10mthCommentedSorry but who is this guy and why is he inside his head? did I forget something.
[Don't worry, I'll be with you every step of the way. But if you somehow ended up breaking something… well, we'll figure something out.]- Virdan_snek10mthCommentedCh 46 Update
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His head then turned to face the small naked girl who, even while shaking and covered in bruises and tears, was staring at him in awe from how quickly he had dispatched the centaurs. Icarus' cold gaze broke as he smiled at her in reassurance, "—a hero." - Virdan_snek11mthReplied to GloriousMilfHunter
me to
"And finish the Akame Ga Kill manga for me. I haven't read the last few chapters. I heard they were kinda mediocre compared to the rest of the series… I still wanna finish it." - Virdan_snek1yrCommented
It was a very fun chapter, I’m looking forward to more!
I found it fun, it wasn't supposed to be serious anyway. - Virdan_snek1yrCommented
There are cars in danmachi?
"I'll go find my brother, I'll likely not take any longer than an hour… Can you just take car… Go with him to the Jaharamakun stand in the meantime?" He asked with a slightly sweaty face - Virdan_snek1yrCommented"Aichi you wanna go eat some sea food? I heard the Magikarps here are great from Jacq." My dad said as we all went to leave the building.
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Gallade is very cool to
Ralts an amazing choice as it evolves into a Gardevoir. A Pokemon with great intellect and move set with being fairy there isn't much it can't do. But I feel like it's something I could catch later on. - Virdan_snek1yrCommented
kekw that's all the character development you need
I honestly dont want to get out of the house right now, I'm pretty exhausted and feeling lazy right now. - Virdan_snek1yrCommentedMy first question would be….why would a skiddo and miltank be out here in the middle of nowhere? I know that there is a pretty big ranch on the outer south side of viridian maybe 3-4 hours out of the city….but from there to here walking or whatever? It would take days if you didn't wander through the city….and I doubt these two did…
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Hmm, your point on Gil's personality and Bazett are correct, so I will take back what I said. But when I said "grammar mistakes" I meant that some of the words you wrote as dialogue can get confusing. Sorry for the miscommunication. For example in chap 11 "He was the sole survivor of the disaster that had taken numerous lives a decade ago and felt it was his duty to help others for the so many that died in his place, and for his father who sought to bring peace to the world." When you wrote "for the so many that died in his place", it was confusing and kind of tripped me while reading. But this is just one example... now that I'm re-reading your story again, Im seeing a lot of problems like these and it's tripping the reader's "flow" if you understand.
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The writing is pretty bad because of grammar mistakes. When reading I have to constantly ignore or interpret what the characters are saying. And I know this is a fanfic, but when the Mc first meets Gilgamesh I felt that gil is a OOC. The way he speaks to the mc is full of arrogance, which is normal. However Gilgamesh makes fun of the MC for being loyal, this is something that Gilgamesh would never do. As a king gil likes loyalty and would most likely call him a mongrel and ignore him. But hey, this is a fanfic, you can make the characters say whatever you want. I just fell that the way bazett, and gilgamesh act is not really in character.
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some of the paragraphs need to be re-read because they don't flow that well, but I Iike the story so far.
Some of you probably like it, some of you don't. Give feedback anyway so I can decide on posting more. - Virdan_snek1yrCommented44,579,000 km2 (17,212,000 sq mi) (1st)[1]
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This is so relatable it’s not even funny
Of course, if your mother kept waking you up by turning the light on for years on end, you'd do anything in order to not get flashbanged every morning. - Virdan_snek1yrReplied to hero4hire
yeah, and apparently it also helps with physical fighting
He showed signs of ADHD and dyslexia, and he spotted some monsters in the forests, convincing him of that fact. He had no idea who or what was responsible for his transmigration, but he wasn't complaining. He grabbed a pebble the size of half his finger next to him and applied some pressure, before hearing an audible crack. He chuckled, being a demigod had its perks. - Virdan_snek1yrCommented
He’s half Japanese if anyone’s won dering
"But with how racist they are against Asians, easily unnoticeable which lets me slip under the radar, as you said. Until I gain some manner of respect or influence by my own hand." - Virdan_snek1yrCommented"Chaldea Security Organization." Zelretch spoke. "Or more specifically – The Organization for the Preservation for Humanity -- Finis Chaldea."
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Loki be speaking to 6 yr olds
"So let me reiterate, you will do nothing." My voice carried my divinity with it, shaking the room around us so my point came across. "We will let whatever happens, happen. Because afterwards, their agreements will be...unsubstantiated. Meaning, they can, no will unravel with the correct pressure. A single string pulled at the right place, and we're right back to where we were previously."