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mlg_camphard188mthReplied to Serenity7Sevenlistening to the book makes those "----------" agonizing to listen to. dash dash dash dash dash dash dash dash dash. ugh.
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Thoughts so far on the novel is this: The author needs to work on his verbs and sentence structure so it reads nice. Correct punctuation needs a little work. Using more descriptive words would make the world and MC clearer than what it has been. MC come across as cold and emotionless. It feels like I'm reading a documentary written by a person who was just getting the main points of the person interviewing the person the book was about. I can understand the main points, but its hard to read when every other sentence has word flow issues or incorrectly structured sentences. I like the book and the idea and story it's trying to convey is entertaining. keep up the writing author and try to keep grinding until you polish out your writing style [img=recommend]
Ch 6 6.HEART TEMPERING - mlg_camphard182yrReplied to WarmaisachCh 1230 Chapter 1230 – Strength
- mlg_camphard182yrCommented
nice
Magnus stood up in his seat, "WHAT? What do you mean? You're just 69," - mlg_camphard182yrCommentedCh 157 157. Onoki's BIG Mistake
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- mlg_camphard182yrCommented
I wanna know what happened to the blind kid
"I wonder how they will all react, Last time they saw me I was crippled and I looked weak and wrinkly, The look on their faces when I come back from the dead to haunt them will be priceless." Jacob laughed to himself. "I don't really care for revenge, but will I make my family die in vain? I don't even know where my father is, but I'm not sad. I'm just living my life….and it feels good. - mlg_camphard182yrCommented"Ah, the ability to distort space. Not many possess it, but never get near any Vampire that you see having weird, blue-colored eyes, those bastards can distort your head and make it explode from the inside out… They're hard to handle…" -Anonymous Vampire Hunter.
- mlg_camphard182yrCommented"Papa's roar… Mightiest!" said Erebus.
- mlg_camphard182yrCommentedThe Skeleton Priest evolved into a Skeleton High Priest and then into a Skeleton Saint, it was a strange Skeleton variant with the power of healing and light magic with him. After evolving into a Skeleton Saint, it gained large white robes and a pope hat, alongside a golden staff. Skeleton Saint became an SS-Rank.
- mlg_camphard182yrCommented
a lot of the authors paragraphs don't glow well. like "4years of younger" in the previous chapter. if you didn't grow up with English then it's gonna be hard to sound the flow out.
"Noah, it's time for bed." Lari approached me, then without sitting next to me on the couch, even telling me that it is time for bed, do you sit next to me like that? - mlg_camphard182yrCommentedCh 165 Flooding Fields
- mlg_camphard182yrCommentedCh 156 Labour Clutch
- mlg_camphard182yrCommentedCh 149 Breeding Grass
- mlg_camphard182yrCommentedCh 134 Tannery Construction (1)
- mlg_camphard182yrCommented
birbs aren't real. they're drones.....
Birb Trapper - mlg_camphard182yrCommentedCh 98 Pushing Responsibilities