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ceapa1mthReplied to IllegalHeliosHousing bubble says hello. Demographic collapse says hello too. Virtually all high- end chips are produced in the 'other' china. What 'The tech giant'? If they are only stealing, that means they will at best be on par.
What could Dante say, it was 2030 and China's technology was on the rise. After America's business empire declined due to the failure of fiat money and the betrayal of Saudi Arabia by eliminating the petrodollar, China quickly showed its fangs.- ceapa1yrCommented
last sentence ruined everything the paragraph tried to build
On the edge of the carriage sat an old, armored man with a robust and muscular build. Although his hair was pure white, he looked as ferocious as a tiger and was extremely imposing. - ceapa1yrCommented
GLORY TO ARSTOTS- wait, wrong game
"That's it, retreat! This is humanity's bastion! As long as we can stand, it shall never fall! Glory to the human race!" - ceapa2yrCommented
if its needless to say, don't say it
Despite its ordinary name, Qingyun Sect was the leading force in not only the Eastern Region but the entire world. The sect was even regarded by some as the mecca of the cultivation world. Needless to say, Qingyun Sect was much powerful than Jiuyang Sect.detail10,000 Years In A Cultivation Sect: I Obtained A Powerful Technique From The StartEastern · Li Baijin - ceapa2yrCommented
in cash? are we in germany?
"The first player to enter White Fog City will receive 100 million in cash!" - ceapa2yrCommented
all sorts of methods? like what? slamming his virtual head against a rock?
Lu Chen began to try all sorts of methods to leave! - ceapa2yrCommented
depends on the ice. if there's oxygen molecules trapped in there, they would be released upon melting, increasing oxygen concentration in the cave. though, you might flood yourself sooner than a noticeable change would occur. all depends on how this yin to ice magic works
Xu Miao still vaguely recalled the science classes during his high-school days. He remembered that ice was a combination of oxygen and hydrogen atoms, so creating these ice cubes and melting them might give him a source of oxygen. He didn't know if it would work or not, but he had to try, or he could be suffocated to death soon. - ceapa2yrCommented
welp, bust the vodka out, u gonna need it
Surstr*mming - ceapa2yrReplied to DoanMela
? its not harming nor manipulating mc. at least not necessarily. if this already qualifies as disgusting in your eyes, I fear for your outlook of life, my friend
"Now, continue to get along with him. You can use the family's resources to get some things for him to rope him in more. Of course, most importantly, find a way to bring him under your command. - ceapa2yrReplied to Emily_Langston
probably: technically no; spiritually yes
"Hello, my name is Chen Heng." - ceapa2yrCommented
except its not 14000 in one punch. whatever, its webnovel fantasy- anything can happen
If a seventh-grade martial artist was caught off guard and struck by 14,000 catties of mighty strength, they would be left crippled even if they managed to survive. - ceapa2yrReplied to Apocalyps
- ceapa2yrReplied to Videos_I_like
No. Even though the grammar isn't the worst i've seen, the quality definitely makes a solid point for it. The story is told in a very monotonous and undescriptive way. Word of advice; if the first paragraph instantly makes you lose all interest, the author's probably done something wrong. Don't know if this improves later and I don't care to find out.
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first paragraph and already a perfect example of y u should show not tell. Its been so long and still the writing is like this? Its hard to enjoy the story if the writing is like this
A group of adventurers was peacefully walking towards the gloomy forest under the silvery moonlight. Where fierce and ferocious beasts dwelled and were scattered every night. The group takes on a rank C quest from the adventurers' guild. Their group consists of 5 humans. A cleric, a thief, a tank, a warrior, and a mage. It's a 2:3 ratio of women and men. The cleric's a woman with an average type of items. The thief's a man equipped with a cloak that hides its appearance from the others. Their tank's a big man worn with the hardest steel plates. Their warrior's pretty experienced and, their mage specializes in two elements which are wind and fire. - ceapa2yrReplied to BaticCh -1 A Brief Message...
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seems almost impossible to actually make an independent institution in a feudal society
"Aside from the fact that you command more power than anyone else in the world?" Donovan joked. "If you are talking about the fact, you are the son of the duke and thought you deserved something for that, then you would be incorrect. This academy is outside of the constraints of nobility. Inside these walls noble rank is meaningless. It has been this way for centuries. The king who founded our academy felt it was best to raise nobles without politics and influence, to give them a better perspective on life. In fact, it is in our ethos that we treat students with indifference. Of course, some teachers take it a bit further and are quite rude to the young ones. Gives them a power trip. Usually, the higher your noble rank the meaner they are." - ceapa2yrCommented
??? doesn't the attitude of the institute as well as kelbor indicate that its quite relaxed? nothing would happen
[Great, now I must place in the knighthood problem, who knows what might happen otherwise.] Zell thought. - ceapa2yrCommented
don't threat? try freat
"I know I will!" Rose said. "I am the legendary hero; everyone will want to be my friend! But do not threat big brother, I can give you some of my friends if no one wants to be your friend!" - ceapa2yrCommented
so much for no dirty tricks
This paragraph has been deleted. - ceapa2yrReplied to HellsGate
maybe too depressed and anxious to rely on his ability. or author conveniently forgot to include it or let the mc forget. either way, it should at least be mentioned in some way. not that it matters, i'm out anyway. can't handle the bad english, good luck to anyone continuing
He got five death because he was interested in seeing what was in the tree, but after a repeated death without result, he decided to stop and just labeled it as a not-to-touch place.