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I have read every chapter, so I want to leave some comments to improve this fic (that I cherish as one of the bests): 1. You should give a check to the fic to correct the grammar mistakes. Not only mine, but some that have been there for months without fixing (Example: the bottle hero Gunhead). 2. Remember to include situations where the MC needs acumen and strategy outside of combat (like when he had to work alongside Sero). Include canon knowledge if you see that it fits. 3. Give more attention to the rest of the class than a punctual mention. Giving attention only to the main group isolate them and marginalize the rest of the characters.
"But it was", not "but it was".
Wish?
"but if I do well", not "but I do well".
"She", not "He"
"the three cases", not "the two cases".
"the three cases", not "the two cases".
"Where´s the gravity chamber?"
"OFA", not "AFO".
"Shoji", not "Shouji".
"Shoji", not "Shouji".
"Shoji", not "Shouji".
"Shoji", not "Shouji".
"Shoji", not "Shouji".
I think you wanted to say "before the day is over".
"Kushina", not "Kurhina".
"not before", not "not after".
"blast", not "black".
What do you mean by flow? I don´t get what it means in the situation.