LonerGirl
I Live in California and love the beach, typewriters my three dogs and writing stories I hope people will enjoy! Also please check out my website Lonergirlwrites.com
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So good
Loving the story!
Reacher,
Try using she, or another way without using her name so much.
Stick to one POV Katherine’s or Adelaide’s.
Sophie ? Sticking with Sophia is better.
Refrain for?
Shouldered?
Making?
Gory. I never saw this coming and I like it!
interesting
Ooh getting better!
Love where the story is going but I think this paragraph is a little confusing, maybe too complicated.
Love the descriptions and details.
Love the insertion of all these tiny details that is really making this story come alive!
Side note, werewolves should be one word. But love the story so far and can't wait to read more. I love the world building the author is doing and the tension building as well. Great Job!!
Love that these conflicts are being revealed through this dialogue. It really shows the emotions and feelings that are at stake.
Great building of tension!
Great character revealing trait about the mom. She doesn't trust men.
I think this paragraph has great conflict about the Youngblood father but also the conflict within Katherine herself. Was the father good or bad? I can't wait to find out !