William_Strickland_6760

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I really don't know what to say to describe how hard I was laughing at the end of this chapter. I love this entire story so far. Please keep it going.

I may be misunderstanding something so please correct me if I'm wrong. he was wearing weighted clothing in the HTC. with "I think" the gravity upped to 10x normal. why would the weighted clothing hinder him that much outside of the HTC with normal gravity.

I know I'm late in this but come on. all of these have been done time and time again. pick someone that hardly ever gets love like Lady Sif or Skye

so far I am really getting into this story. the only issue i have is the going back and forth between the MC being referred to as both him and her to the point that it was confusing me at first if the MC was male or female. so other than grammatical errors. good story

personally would keep the talismans but ditch the oni mask past being a medium to absorb them into his body. I am enjoying the story and think that it should stay as a crossover like you have it. the only change past the mask I would do is maybe tone down the yandere side of Mikaela. those parts are a little cringe for me. but hey. it's your story. whatever you do or don't is up to you. just hope that you keep writing.

I would say keep this story but rewrite if your not satisfied with how it has turned out so far

completely disagree. a chosen one other than harry potter is something that isn't done all that often and is a welcome change for me

I honestly didn't think I would get into this as much as I have. character development is far better than expected and so far I have no complaints about this story. truly hope this story doesn't get dropped. wonderful job. please keep it going.