john_timothy

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It’s all good!

Hey good on you! You took criticism like a champ and are trying to improve! That makes you better than most writers on the platform haha.

You don’t generally do drastic pov changes like this because it’s very jarring and confusing. Especially after the big fight with Vilgax since it makes it far less satisfying or interesting.

He can’t the omnitrix has failsafes that would prevent that

This chapter was very cringey. Pointless drama that was cringe and overall hurt the character you created by making him cowardly and having him make idiotic choices. I have an idea of what you were trying to write here and while it could definitely work and even add character growth and move other subplots along the execution wasn’t really good and it just fell flat.

Cell?