Ile_Isabella
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Discord: Ile Isabella#1100 I let out the action and romance that is stuck in my head through different genres heheđđ
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Ile_Isabella5mthCommentedCh 3 I'm not going anywhere, you know?- Ile_Isabella5mthCommented
True. Let's keep Hae-won company
"Besides, Baek-Hyun is always out for work and I can't let you stay home alone. I'll be here all day and night." - Ile_Isabella7mthReplied to I_Am_MCh 63 I must've hurt him really badly
- Ile_Isabella7mthCommentedCh 63 I must've hurt him really badly
- Ile_Isabella7mthCommentedCh 59 Hae-won's outburst
- Ile_Isabella7mthCommentedCh 14 Illusionary World
- Ile_Isabella7mthReplied to Byul_Byre
- Ile_Isabella7mthCommentedCh 13 Chapter 13: Entrance Exam: Mental Check (1).
- Ile_Isabella7mthReplied to Harem_Queen
can we talk? Please check your discord for my message
But now he couldn't move his gaze away from Yu Dong alright? Even though her curves were encased in those ugly and worn-out clothes, there was no point in hiding that he was seriously turned on by her. And the sway of her a*s as she walked, he couldn't even look away - he never paid any attention to it before but her butt was perfect for holding on to as she rode her husband, driving their thing inside and out while making them howl in pleasure. - Ile_Isabella7mthCommented
i guess that's how we all do
Ummie remained in the class, since she is not used to the environment, she picked up a novel to keep herself busy. - Ile_Isabella7mthCommented
I'd advice this paragraph to be shortened. Cut it into three or two. However you can
My name is Ummi Isah and I reside with my mother, Mrs. Maryam Idris. She holds a position as a banker in one of the financial institutions. Currently, I am a student in the second year of high school. Due to my mother's frequent transfers, I have been compelled to change schools numerous times. Besides my mother, I have no other companions, and she holds immense importance in my life. I prioritize both her and my academic pursuits. One might inquire about my father; however, I possess no knowledge of his identity or physical appearance except through my mother. Since comprehending the world around me, life has presented its fair share of challenges for both my mother and me. Nevertheless, by the grace of God, we have managed to persevere. Interestingly, the most amusing aspect of my life is that I have consistently received scholarships from an unknown benefactor since my early schooling years. All glory be to God. - Ile_Isabella7mthCommented
Full stop is missing. Capital letters for names and things like I need to be capitalized
"You don't know how excited I am that you are finally awake dear, you really scared me, i could have taken you to the hospital if only I had the money my poor heart was about to die of anxiety, thankfully our good neighbor got the nurse down the street to take a look at you, alyoo, what could i have done without you..." - Ile_Isabella7mthCommented
instead of using brackets, use commaJack, the guy who just stepped in,
Jack (the guy who just stepped In) looked at catori confused at the way she was looking around with a surprise gaze, he couldn't help but ask nana (the old lady) what was wrong with her. - Ile_Isabella7mthCommented
Too long, shorten it into four, if you can.
She broke into tears immediately, catori just stared dumbfounded at her, what the hell was wrong with this old lady.Don't she understand English, just as she was about to repeat her question, a squeak sound sounded, she looked towards the direction of the sound and much to my surprise it was the sound of door opening, does doors in this place normally make such creepy sound. The door to the room opened and a young man just about her age stepped in, he looked disheveled and should I say unkempt, and wait.., the clothes he is wearing is totally different from the ones the men in my kingdom wore, she looked down at the dress she was wearing and was shocked, she was wearing a gown just slightly above her knees, she looked at the old lady, she recognized the clothes she wore even if it was tattered, that was the clothes married woman wear's in her kingdom. - Ile_Isabella7mthCommented
long paragraph
They both said together, however with a different meaning, what catori meant by her question is that she thought he meant he knew why she was here and how she ended up here, Nana on the other hand is thinking that he meant he knew was she was behaving strangely immediately she woke up, both of them stared at him expecting to hear the answer in their heart that is bothering them greatly. - Ile_Isabella8mthCommented
it's great but try to shorten the long sentence, okay?
This paragraph has been deleted. - Ile_Isabella8mthCommentedCh 2 Chapter Two: Back To Four Years Ago