I think it's a good idea with potential, though the main character feels a bit flat because you often write her as foolish or careless. However, these are things that can be fixed, the story is just beginning. Don't give up, and thank you for the effort you put into this work.

It is a good story, it has good writing, moves more or less quickly, the main character is a beauty, but I think I can't continue reading it, it is too tragic in my opinion. It made me cry for a long time and it's not even close to being over. So I'll come back when it's finished or I've calmed down enough to continue reading, because it's honestly a good story.

Thanks for the chapter

Tanks for the charter.

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