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no man let her be dead seriously nobles can slaughter villages like pigs just to keep their secrets its just one maid what's there to cry about it
You have already created a good story with many possibilities to carry it forward just continue from where you left that's the best option because I like the development of story upto this point and you will have more freedom to write because you have a established mc and a interesting plot going on
We its one of the best twilight fics i have read just love it and the writing skills of the author is another level its so good please continue it and complete it❤❤❤❤❤
excellent work good development of oc for someone who has reincarnation immortality as its good to see them do anything they want on wimp without too much care as shown in some other fics with just logic been serzech is as powerful as shiva and mc can't beat ultimate class because they want a shitty plot its much better to se a op mc behave live himself not some shitty plot correction bit*h
at first i thought it would be a mtl rip-off but i didn't expect it to be such a good story with so many plot change possibility its just addicting to read as for those who think that its not good or world setting is not well-made, well anything can happen in marvel so instead of leaving a bad review just don't read it and for the idiot who was saying its harem with no plot b*tch read more now it has a good steady plot than many other pokemon harem fic..
i mean what is this it's not readable at all and I read mtl all the time but its harder than those its so f ed up so many plot holes and unnecessary changes and if you want to show politics as all other who make mc a villain please know how to write that stuff the way you wrote it is like a kids play imitating politics I mean at least see if your story structure is coming together it could have been so easily be countered if you used some more open approach for many things like the system can do so much but you make it so mc didn't use it to its potential.
use mcu movies and a few ff for reference as its quite easy to tackle that way or else just make it based on mcu with adding characters to fit that plot.
overpowered politics for fun are the best combination its like i wanna be the king and no one will refuse but where's the fun...slowly creating a dark and twisted yet enjoyable character its just the best and this book is way more intense then the other ones its fun to see different styles from one author its shows your talent keep it up....
its a good work but the mc is idiot and stupid like he could have done so much with only rais magic but he was to obsessed to come out of the neighbourhood and then he summoned goku like you expect a Saiyan to care about lives while fighting its just pure stupidity of the mc.....