Kydul1137
I love writing more than I like reading and I love gundams, dragons, demons and gods. That is all. My alt account is “Tetsuno_DGB”
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Kydul11371yrReplied to xXShadow_God52XxI knowwww the story has cool ideas but the actual story is bad, that’s why I stopped🥲
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Tried to make more ancient plot twist; like the true beginning to everything, the origin of everything. I thought it was a cool idea
"The Primordial King." - Kydul11371yrReplied to kizitomayanja
Liking the new lore?
"The Primordial King." - Kydul11371yrReplied to kizitomayanja
No, he made sure not to kill them
A storm of blood and black acid rained down from the heavens as though the angels of god had all been struck down, their blood flowing from the clouds like rivers. The melted and unrecognizable corpses of dragons and drakes alike fell from the sky like birds dropping dead in the apocalypse. - Kydul11371yrReplied to Ashley7Black
Well, it is a card game I created some time ago. But you don’t play character cards, only elemental spells, while you have your character card with natures limiting the spells you can use
"Now, every element has elements that it is weak to. A spell is cancelled out by these elements. So, water is weak to thunder. This means that my spell is countered, and you take no damage. But I do. Since my spell was countered, your spell also does increased damage." A die appeared in Covenel's palm. It went up to twenty, and it just dropped down to ten from the spell. - Kydul11371yrReplied to Ashley7Black
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The story has promise, the writing quality is good, and the fact that it is Vikings and not your basic reincarnation/system story is a breath of fresh air. I enjoyed reading this and I hope it is continued, I think it has potential and most people would enjoy this story. Please keep up the great work, author!
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My only critique is to add detail of surrounding. Example, what kind of house were they in, or where did this take place? What setting was it? How many and what kind of people were around? What kind of lighting is it? Torches of firelight casting dancing shadows, or rays of light through a window? Etc. Just surrounding details, other than that there are no critiques I have
Ch 2 The Void - Kydul11371yrCommented
Interesting. So no magic, only physical enhancemen t
[By Power we mean enhanced strength, sight, hearing and thought] said the third. - Kydul11371yrCommentedCh 1 Embodiment
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This is giving me FableHaven vibes
I was gifted a book and my brother was gifted a mask. My little brother thought that the strange mask was COOL. And so he wore it and went like he was the ancient Egyptian Monarch. My aunt had a satisfied look. So I thought maybe that evil smirk was just my imagination. But still the book she gifted me looked like it was covered in some purple dark shades and made me want to run away from it. But I still offered my thanks to Aunt Eville and took the book to my room. I just wanted to keep it somewhere I would never see it again. So I kept it on the old books shelf.