Thank you! I will keep that in mind

Hi, thank you for your comment! I actually realize I made so many mistakes so I end up deleting the chapter because it was so hard to edit all of them at once. I even post a wrong chapter. I won't quit writing though!

The story was great overall. Good job! I love how you show each character's personality. The way you show the situation made it easier to understand. I love it!

I don't really want to offend you but the info dump bothers me a little bit. It's quite can confusing at first but the plot story was great. I think your story will improve a lot of you add more dialogues in it. Each chapter was very short but I sort of understand a little bit since some of the readers could get boring if the chapter was too long. I don't really understand how your magic system works so I had to read all of your chapters twice or more. The introduction of the characters quite confusing as well.

Thank you for you comment! I'll try hard to improve it!

Thank you so much for your comment! I'll try to improve my grammar